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To Regain

In the empty space \ In the soft, still forest

By Mackenzie DavisPublished 4 months ago Updated 3 months ago 1 min read
To Regain
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In the empty space

In the soft, still forest

Howled the wind lace

Howled the breath gust.


In the still, soft forest

I hunted for my shadow.

Howl of my breathy gust

painted a frost. Snow


hunted for my shadow.

I ran beyond, I ran behind,

painting frost beside snow

panting for this race—of a kind.


I ran beyond. I ran behind.

Then moonlight forced us pause.

Panting for this race of a kind,

we stood as ice, against the thaw.


Then moonlight forced us pause

and I stood shadowless.

We stood as ice, against the thaw

United one end: a shadow to possess.


And I, I stood shadowless

And ran the same, it to regain.

Snow and I united to possess

one of us the end in vain.


And ran the same to it regain

(Howl of the winded lace)

One of us the end in vain,

(In the empty space.)




Thank you so much for reading! This is a pantoum. It follows an abab rhyme scheme, with the 2nd and 4th lines repeated as the 1st and 3rd of the next stanza. The final stanza takes the 1st and 3rd lines from the initial stanza and inverts them as the 2nd and 4th.

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Mackenzie Davis

“When you are describing a shape, or sound, or tint, don’t state the matter plainly, but put it in a hint. And learn to look at all things with a sort of mental squint.” Lewis Carroll

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  • Kayleigh Fraser ✨about a month ago

    I’ve never seen this form before. I really enjoyed this, your opening verse is outstanding ✨❤️

  • Rob Angeliabout a month ago

    Great nocturnal snow/forest vibes. So many of the images speak stillness, but the spilling rhythm drives the frantic search. I'm beginning to see more and more the significance of the Lewis Caroll citation in your profile! You hit for that fine line between oblique expression and transparency, which can help us get closer as writers to "expressing the unexpressible." Reminds me, Richard Strauss wrote an opera called Die Frau Ohne Schatten (the Woman without a Shadow) in the 1910's: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Die_Frau_ohne_Schatten

  • I've read pantoums before, but this is the pantoumiest.

  • J. S. Wade4 months ago

    Love the pantoum scheme. New to me. Excellent poem, expressive feels.

  • Donna Fox4 months ago

    Mackenzie, I thoroughly enjoyed the rhyme scheme and repetitive language through out! I appreciate the insight at the bottom, explaining the type of poem and how it is meant to be structured. This was very enticing and pleasing to read! I think my favourite line(s) was "we stood as ice, against the thaw". It felt so whimsical, enchanting and almost haunting.

  • Very Pretty form--and the still frost forest.

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