Everything slowly seeping away. Darkness
Creeps in and covers my vision, a
Lasting embrace, momentary silence. Joy
In feeling a sudden
Peace,
So careful and quiet, but the
Eclipse of it ends, and I am brought to life again.
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Outstanding
Excellent work. Looking forward to reading more!
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Compelling and original writing
Creative use of language & vocab
Excellent storytelling
Original narrative & well developed characters
Eye opening
Niche topic & fresh perspectives
Heartfelt and relatable
The story invoked strong personal emotions
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Comments (2)
Tender and delicate, your words feel as gentle as one might hope an undertaker's touch would be. A final caring caress from one who sees beyond the ghosts trapped in blank stares. Lovely work!
I love the way that you take the idea of the eclipse passing like a moment in someone's life of peace and calm, only for that to shortly go away. I often think that eclipses are cold but this one made me feel warm and still, not badly so but just halted.