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The Lust Between Us

An acrostic poem

By Gina C.Published 4 months ago • 2 min read
Top Story - June 2023
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Daylight bleeds

In through satin curtains, and the

Saturnalia of our fairytale last night

Transcends this harrowed space (in which my)

Restive heartbeats still.

All the lust between us (now a vapor...)

Clouds that dissipate into the

Tapered framework of your chalky windowsill.

I think I've fallen deeply, an

Odalisque I am to this

Niaiserie; to a Rome that can't be built (within the) single breath of midnight thrills--all the lust between us (now a vapor as) my restive heartbeats still.

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-Gina C.🧚‍♀️✨

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Author's Note: I feel like I may have pigeonholed myself into accurately classifying all of my poems now. 😅

This one is a mix of my Signature and Petite lines because - while short - it carries more of the typical rhyme and flow pattern of my Signature collection. I also relied a bit heavily on the use of embellishments (bolding, underlining, and italics) to ensure the rhythm carried the way I wanted it to (which is something I've been trying to do less of within the Petite line.) Therefore, I am now creating a third line:

Signature Mini 😅 (I'm kind of laughing at myself with all this, and it's ok if you do, too! ☺️)

Anyway, here are the definitions of some of the keywords in here, which have been borrowed from the Merriam-Webster Online Dictionary and Wiktionary:

niaiserie noun

njɛz.ʁi (niais +‎ -erie)

foolish talk or behavior

odalisque noun

ō-də-ˌlisk

an enslaved woman

saturnalia noun

sa-tər-ˈnāl-yə

an unrestrained, often licentious celebration

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If you'd like to read other poems from my Signature Mini collection, check out these:

This poem was written for the Dancing with Distraction Challenge. :)

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About the Creator

Gina C.

Achievements:

  • Twice-published in Vocal's Moment of Freedom Collection:

My Soul of Red

Free Verse

Free-Form poet of ethereal style. 🧚‍♀️✨

Fantasy writer.

A sucker for a good rhyme. ☺️

Fueled by a conflicted soul of fire & water. ❤️‍🔥🧜🏻‍♀️

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  • HandsomelouiiThePoet (Lonzo ward)13 days ago

    💖💖📝✌️

  • MT Poetry4 months ago

    Wow, this poem is absolutely mesmerizing! The way you play with imagery and emotions is truly captivating. Well done!!!💕🥰🙌

  • Brenton F4 months ago

    You are in your element here and this is truly shining loud and proud in this one!

  • Mackenzie Davis4 months ago

    Your diction is always a lesson for me, which I love. I love words and learning more of them, so I appreciate your glossaries. This is gorgeous. The verses are musical and serene. I want to go back to it. Congratulations on TS!

  • Darling Darling Darling your Words Dazzled me the Whole Ride Through✨📝😉💖🎉also Congratulations on your “Top Story “ Duh❗

  • Congratulations on Top Story!

  • ARC4 months ago

    This one literally made me shiver as I read it. Wow. Sorceress. I love that, recently, I am getting two-pieces-in-one with your Author's Note / "below section". It's just as enjoyable to read as the "above section" lol Congrats on TS and outstanding creation, Gina :)

  • Heather Hubler4 months ago

    Congratulations on Top Story!!

  • Dana Stewart4 months ago

    Congratulations on Top Story! 🎉

  • Congratulations on your Top Story and I have an album by a band called Saturnalia. It's not very good

  • You win for using "Saturnalia" in an acrostic!

  • Cendrine Marrouat4 months ago

    Gina, I could feel every word!!!

  • Poppy4 months ago

    Gorgeously written and thanks for the new words :)

  • J. R. Lowe4 months ago

    Beautifully written! Really loved the definitions you provided at the end too haha - I was curious as to what those words meant.

  • Ah okay, now I see where my confusion came from. I should have read this before the Maestranza poem 🤦‍♀️🤦‍♀️ So this is the Origin story of your Signature Mini. I loved the word Odalisque. Your poem was as beautiful as always!

  • Neesem Khan4 months ago

    Truly amazing!

  • Dana Stewart4 months ago

    Amazing, Gina! The way you paint with emotion is truly an art form. I love any label you put on these, it’s a gift to read your work!

  • Some wonderful words to get lost in, Another beauty

  • That ofttimes hollow feeling we have the morning after, as we remember the wonders of the past evening's trysts in the light & emptiness of day.

  • J. S. Wade4 months ago

    Beautiful expressions Gina! The only thing to magnify this would have been a sound track, though I think I heard one. The impressed empress resting content! 🥰

  • Excellent flow. And I love the explanations at the end too!

  • Cathy holmes4 months ago

    Fantastic job, as always. You are amazing.

  • Andrew C McDonald4 months ago

    Wow. How does one truly comment upon perfection? Absolutely Gorgeously Written. You have my jealous attention. 🎶🥰🎶

  • Dana Crandell4 months ago

    One of my favorite things about reading your work is the distraction of looking up a definition or two. I'd already done so before I read your notes after the poem. lol

  • Heather Hubler4 months ago

    I love any name you choose to describe these lovely pieces!! My inner word nerd is so satisfied with this one. Beautiful imagery created with just a few short lines. Loved it!!

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