The Eclipse Was on the Other Side
A wannabe Ghazal Poem

When I expected to see the unknown skies yonder,
I learned that the stars were hidden from our wonder.
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The eclipse was much farther, on the other side,
Unseen to us, unwitnessable apparition to subside.
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But the mind and soul can feel the changes of beyond,
Visible in my kids’ restlessness, a force unable to succumb.
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Fidgeting annoying gestures, animalistic growls, desire to eat,
Uncontrollable cries, wanting more and feeling incomplete.
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The moon in its full force protruding gently from my mind,
I imagine its golden-ringed perfection eclipsed, no rewind.
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With a focus on totality, is the Moon’s eclipse journey forgotten?
Days before and beyond the eclipse, we feel its effects, drunken.
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The eclipse of the mind was thoroughly feelable to us, alive
In our souls, even if its celestial view was inherently denied.
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Inspired by A.H. Mehr’s poem, where I first learned about the Ghazal Poem form, I tried writing my own. I hope it managed to be in the correct form, even if I had trouble keeping the Bah’r. It is a challenging form of poetry and I respect the poets who can write effortlessly.
Regarding the eclipse, in Europe, it was not visible, but we could thoroughly feel its effects on our behavior and energy shifts. I tried to express that.
Thank you to Claire Kelly, Dave Logan, and The Sturg — the talented editors of Write Under the Moon.
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About the Creator
Gabriela Trofin-Tatár
Passionate about tech, studying Modern Journalism at NYU, and mother of 3 littles. Curious, bookaholic and travel addict. I also write on Medium and Substack: https://medium.com/@chicachiflada & https://chicachiflada.substack.com/
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