The Eclipse
A double acrostic
Darkness
Ascends upon you
Restrains the blazing sun
Keeping its pace, at a crawl
Nibbles at the ripening litchi
Even as it starts receding
Stand up and watch
Sunlight
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(This piece is something that popped into my mind a while ago, prompted by the Eclipse challenge, but I have only just managed to sit down to it and put some flesh on the idea. I like merging styles and forms to generate something new so this concrete poetry/double acrostic is right up my street. Well, as for concrete poetry, my idea was slightly different but this is the best I could do with what Vocal makes possible. Still not sure if this version is final so maybe I will revisit and fiddle with it when better ideas appear.)
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Katarzyna Popiel
A translator, a writer. Two languages to reconcile, two countries called home.
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Comments (4)
Outstanding! Love the double acrostic and concrete elements which added to the piece’s impact without distracting from the great line progression
Nibbles at the ripening litchi - I love that!
Hi Kp in Uk - I so agree with our mutual Chum, Rachel. You both are writers...I certainly am not; I don't even know how to pronounce 'Acrostic.' As mentioned, I just like to put my silly sketches-stories out there; just fun for me at this stage. If you have a moment please see 'Baby Mamas' ..you may relate? j.in.l.a.
This was excellent! I mean, double acostic - magic. But then look at how it looks in the page! Phenomenal! This is masterful!