The moon and stars
came out to play,
At the end of a long hot day.
Low in the sky,
the sun caught the moons eye,
As she took in his beautiful glow.
He melted her heart
as his fires grew bright,
Til his departure turned dusk into night.
Glancing at the blushing moon,
a star asks “Why are you red?”
“I’ve been chasing the sun around the world,
to wave him goodnight before bed!”
The laughing comet crept up from behind,
“I know why she is red;
she really couldn’t avert her eyes,
from hot sun getting ready for bed!”
About the Creator
Hazel Rymell
..Suddenly I crash back down to earth with a big almighty bump!
...when not in a dolly daydream, creative me is at home in the UK doing the normal everyday mundane jobs, that seem to go on forever...until the daydreaming kicks in again...
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Comments (23)
hahaha, simple and cute ;)
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Nice.
This was joy to read, nice work.
Great story!! I post similar stuff and fiction stories like this one, you should check it out!! Have a good day!
Love love love 😍 ✨🎯😉
So cute and charming!
Very cute 🥰
I love the idea of the moon and sun affecting each other, having a relationship. We thought it was just astrophysics!
Cute personifications 🌞🌚
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Congrats on the top story - well deserved.
Loved the moon blushing for chasing the sun and the comet laughing. This was so fun and sweet :) Congratulations on Top Story!
Great story!! I post similar stuff and fiction stories like this one, you should check it out!! Have a good day!
I love this!! Absolutely wonderful! <3
This is so beautiful; I really loved the line about chasing the sun around. 😍 Excellent and well-done!
Impressive, beautifully written. ❤
Hearted and subscribed
Very sweet poem ❤️ I also love anything with the moon🌛
The answers are all there, they are just good at hiding from us, great work
That is lovely, the first piece of yours that I have read, so impressed I have subscribed
This is great. love it.
I'm a sucker for a moon poem - this was so cute! Fantastic! :)
That’s really good, nice job, maybe the sun mooned her 🤦🏻♀️