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The Blushing Moon

Poem

By Hazel Rymell Published 2 years ago 1 min read
Top Story - January 2023
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The Blushing Moon
Photo by Nick Owuor (astro.nic.visuals) on Unsplash

The moon and stars

came out to play,

At the end of a long hot day.

Low in the sky,

the sun caught the moons eye,

As she took in his beautiful glow.

He melted her heart

as his fires grew bright,

Til his departure turned dusk into night.

Glancing at the blushing moon,

a star asks “Why are you red?”

“I’ve been chasing the sun around the world,

to wave him goodnight before bed!”

The laughing comet crept up from behind,

“I know why she is red;

she really couldn’t avert her eyes,

from hot sun getting ready for bed!”

surreal poetry
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About the Creator

Hazel Rymell

..Suddenly I crash back down to earth with a big almighty bump!

...when not in a dolly daydream, creative me is at home in the UK doing the normal everyday mundane jobs, that seem to go on forever...until the daydreaming kicks in again...

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  • Cendrine Marrouat10 months ago

    There is so much to love about this poem. Well done!

  • A beautiful poem that I missed

  • Andrei Z.12 months ago

    I didn't notice the read moon last night, but your poem is great!!

  • This is really very creative and beautifully written. Very good job Hazel.

  • Dana Stewart12 months ago

    I really love the dreamlike language, chasing the sun around the world is such a beautiful line, and the comet observation brings it full circle. ❤️

  • This had such a nice feel. A very enchanting poem. I kept thinking of a narrator in my head reading this poem with illustrations like the way they do in movies sometimes.

  • Gina C.12 months ago

    This is so beautiful; I read this previously but enjoyed it just as much the second time!

  • Mokshaabout a year ago

    The use of personification, assigning human qualities to the moon, sun, and stars, adds a sense of enchantment to the scene. The poem's rhyme scheme and playful tone make it a delightful read. Overall, it is a charming and imaginative take on the beauty of the night sky. Its blend of romance and humor creates a delightful and memorable piece.

  • Linda Marryabout a year ago

    hahaha, simple and cute ;)

  • P. K. Ganiabout a year ago

    This was joy to read, nice work.

  • Love love love 😍 ✨🎯😉

  • Stephanie J. Bradberryabout a year ago

    So cute and charming!

  • Melissa Ingoldsbyabout a year ago

    Very cute 🥰

  • Jayabout a year ago

    I love the idea of the moon and sun affecting each other, having a relationship. We thought it was just astrophysics!

  • Rachel Roseabout a year ago

    Cute personifications 🌞🌚

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  • Cathy holmesabout a year ago

    Congrats on the top story - well deserved.

  • Heather Hublerabout a year ago

    Loved the moon blushing for chasing the sun and the comet laughing. This was so fun and sweet :) Congratulations on Top Story!

  • sleepy draftsabout a year ago

    I love this!! Absolutely wonderful! <3

  • Gina C.about a year ago

    This is so beautiful; I really loved the line about chasing the sun around. 😍 Excellent and well-done!

  • C. H. Richardabout a year ago

    Hearted and subscribed

  • C. H. Richardabout a year ago

    Very sweet poem ❤️ I also love anything with the moon🌛

  • The answers are all there, they are just good at hiding from us, great work

  • That is lovely, the first piece of yours that I have read, so impressed I have subscribed

  • Cathy holmesabout a year ago

    This is great. love it.

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