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Showgirl

Whispers in the stairwell

By S. Gabriela Heitzinger Published about a year ago Updated about a year ago 1 min read
Top Story - March 2023
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Showgirl
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I´m sure I knew her

unintentional showgirl

always going with the flow girl

big city girl

pretty girl

dancing in her nightgown

life of the party

downtown

always carlessness

her crown

a smiley face

sometimes a

five second frown

not ever

to be brought down

incredibly sound

in not being

homebound

so much adour

for everything

she found around

excitedly squicking

wheezing

out loud

freedom

way beyond any count

her life

a never ending

rollercoaster ride

in a glass elivator

9 storeys above ground.

Tired feet resting

oddly comfortably

on soft,

cool concrete

whispers in the stairwell

unveiling something other

than I knew so well

a single night

not covering who she is

same eyes

maybe a touch

more grey

more wise

but something behind them

different

unfamiliar

but sincere

and finally

you

cristal clear

the things you say

same voice

such a different word-choice

cautiously and silently

following every sound

mesmerized

by the new person

I seem to have found.

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About the Creator

S. Gabriela Heitzinger

I'm a filmmaker from Vienna who loves to do literally anything artsy. From drawing and painting to music to arts and crafts to screenwriting to... I also love to write:) AND read ;) thanks for stopping by <3

Insta: @gabshxtshow

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  • Gerard DiLeo6 months ago

    I really liked this. I know this is waaaay off-base and nothing like what you intended, but you could easily associated this with one's cat. I'm not a "cat person" [woofwoof], but "same eyes maybe a touch more grey more wise but something behind them different unfamiliar but sincere..."line put into me a feeling of the ethereal of a different lifeform altogether. Not a poignant point, just a fun one. Your rhythm was mesmerizing.

  • Lana V Lynx6 months ago

    I know that girl too! Great poem with a nice flow and rhythm to it.

  • Roy Stevensabout a year ago

    That has great flow that sweeps the reader along. I liked it very much!

  • Srimathi.crabout a year ago

    that was awesome!!

  • Cheryl E Prestonabout a year ago

    Love this

  • Brenton Fabout a year ago

    That is so cool! 👏

  • This poem unveils within me an ardent sentiment of association and commiseration, as though the subject portrayed resonates deeply with my being. The vivid portrayal of an unrestrained and daring maiden, perpetually acquiescing to the currents of existence and living on her own terms, seems to strike a chord with my own sensibilities. The conception of an individual who boldly ventures out into the world and unearths the thrill in every moment appears to hold immense value to you. The poem insinuates that human beings are not always as they appear, and that even the most unencumbered of individuals may conceal intricacies and obscurities. The sensation of disclosure and wonderment that the speaker undergoes when realizing that there is more to this maiden than meets the eye seems to resonate deeply within you. Perfectly done, I made sure to find you on your instagram :)

  • Quincy.Vabout a year ago

    This poem beautifully captures the essence of a free-spirited and adventurous woman, and the speaker's discovery of a new and sincere side to her.👌👌👌🧡🧡

  • Melissa Ingoldsbyabout a year ago

    Very interesting 👌hearted congratulations on top story

  • Donna Reneeabout a year ago

    Congratulations! That was/is really beautiful and quite thought provoking… I’ve read it three times now and I’m seeing a little more meaning each time.

  • Dana Stewartabout a year ago

    I really love this! Congratulations on Top Story and you have a new subscriber!

  • Stephanie J. Bradberryabout a year ago

    Nice flow. Congratulations on your Top Story!

  • Congratulations 🎉

  • Stephen Kramer Avitabileabout a year ago

    Loved this! Again, an excellent flow to it, such an enjoyable read. I especially loved the lines "a single night | not covering who she is"

  • Tina D'Angeloabout a year ago

    Beautiful- stories that make us feel are the best!

  • Harmony Kentabout a year ago

    Wonderful imagery and so evocative, Gabriela 💕🙂

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