Showgirl
Whispers in the stairwell
I´m sure I knew her
unintentional showgirl
always going with the flow girl
big city girl
pretty girl
dancing in her nightgown
life of the party
downtown
always carlessness
her crown
a smiley face
sometimes a
five second frown
not ever
to be brought down
incredibly sound
in not being
homebound
so much adour
for everything
she found around
excitedly squicking
wheezing
out loud
freedom
way beyond any count
her life
a never ending
rollercoaster ride
in a glass elivator
9 storeys above ground.
Tired feet resting
oddly comfortably
on soft,
cool concrete
whispers in the stairwell
unveiling something other
than I knew so well
a single night
not covering who she is
same eyes
maybe a touch
more grey
more wise
but something behind them
different
unfamiliar
but sincere
and finally
you
cristal clear
the things you say
same voice
such a different word-choice
cautiously and silently
following every sound
mesmerized
by the new person
I seem to have found.
About the Creator
S. Gabriela Heitzinger
I'm a filmmaker from Vienna who loves to do literally anything artsy. From drawing and painting to music to arts and crafts to screenwriting to... I also love to write:) AND read ;) thanks for stopping by <3
Insta: @gabshxtshow
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Comments (16)
I really liked this. I know this is waaaay off-base and nothing like what you intended, but you could easily associated this with one's cat. I'm not a "cat person" [woofwoof], but "same eyes maybe a touch more grey more wise but something behind them different unfamiliar but sincere..."line put into me a feeling of the ethereal of a different lifeform altogether. Not a poignant point, just a fun one. Your rhythm was mesmerizing.
I know that girl too! Great poem with a nice flow and rhythm to it.
That has great flow that sweeps the reader along. I liked it very much!
that was awesome!!
Love this
That is so cool! 👏
This poem unveils within me an ardent sentiment of association and commiseration, as though the subject portrayed resonates deeply with my being. The vivid portrayal of an unrestrained and daring maiden, perpetually acquiescing to the currents of existence and living on her own terms, seems to strike a chord with my own sensibilities. The conception of an individual who boldly ventures out into the world and unearths the thrill in every moment appears to hold immense value to you. The poem insinuates that human beings are not always as they appear, and that even the most unencumbered of individuals may conceal intricacies and obscurities. The sensation of disclosure and wonderment that the speaker undergoes when realizing that there is more to this maiden than meets the eye seems to resonate deeply within you. Perfectly done, I made sure to find you on your instagram :)
This poem beautifully captures the essence of a free-spirited and adventurous woman, and the speaker's discovery of a new and sincere side to her.👌👌👌🧡🧡
Very interesting 👌hearted congratulations on top story
Congratulations! That was/is really beautiful and quite thought provoking… I’ve read it three times now and I’m seeing a little more meaning each time.
I really love this! Congratulations on Top Story and you have a new subscriber!
Nice flow. Congratulations on your Top Story!
Congratulations 🎉
Loved this! Again, an excellent flow to it, such an enjoyable read. I especially loved the lines "a single night | not covering who she is"
Beautiful- stories that make us feel are the best!
Wonderful imagery and so evocative, Gabriela 💕🙂