these waves of depression
are pounding my shores
relentlessly until cessation
and then nothing
until the next tide
the next change
the next ride
the next strange
one moment elation
and the next
a deluge of hurt
compound by distance
compounded by pain
crashing bashing thrashing
again and again and again
until the next rise
the next crest
the next tide
the next best
i have no control
over this overwhelming
abject misery
it does as it pleases
it haunts and it teases
it folds and it creases
but it never releases
its not finished with me
i'm not finished you see
i know i’ll never be free
i opened this door
and then lost the key
until the next high
the next slide
the next buy
my very next tide
this is not a forever thing
it’s just a little piece
a fractional timing anomaly
never to be released
this is merely a transitional phase
my humanity slapping my face
i'm dumping on me so i can see
my here and now, my place
until the next best well
the next plummeting ride
next flotsam ridden swell
and until the next tide
About the Creator
Brenton F
It's just a token of my extreme - Frank Zappa
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Compelling and original writing
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When We Were Very Young
In another box set that my parents got me when I was younger contained four books by A.A. Milne. 'When We Were Very Young' is a collection of poems that Milne wrote for his son Christopher Robin. This is a book that is full of references to Mr. Edward Bear, but a lot of the poems give some various descriptions of life of a very young child and where, when, how and why they do what they do. The illustrations are quite cute for you can see what Christopher Robin is and may be thinking. Also, Pooh Bear does make his self-known at various points. I have read these verses many, many times over the years and each time make me feel good about myself.
By Mark Graham6 days ago in Critique
Comments (15)
Congrats on Top Story!🥳
Your dedication shows in your work—keep it going, congratulations!
Man, this is so well done and so deserving of Top Story. I believe your words here will touch a lot of people.
Yayyyyy so happy to see Vocal welcome you back with a Top Story! Congratulations! Loved your poem!
Brenton, this has so much depth and such a relatable perspective! Great work!
Congratulations on your top story Brenton. So well deserved
Mate, this is so so so relatable. Like others have said, hope you're doing alright! Congrats on a beautiful, if tough Top Story!
If this is autobiographical, hang in there!
The ebb and flow of this poem captures the feeling and fight of depression remarkably well. Beautifully done. Keep your head up and ride out the waves.
A perfect description. Hoping you're ok.
Oh I hope this is just a poem and not literal. Nice to see you back
Absolutely killed this one dude 🔥😢👍
Wow. That was powerful. Well done.
I hope this phase rides out and you feel better soon!
Just riding the wave … I really related to this one 🫶