Little Cottonwood
An evening up-canyon
Last night, in a high canyon, I watched the sun set.
This mouth of the earth opened wide, jaws distended,
As though it wished to swallow the sky’s amber hues whole.
The void like conifer silhouettes on ridges
Looked all the world like the barbed obsidian teeth
of an ancient serpent’s twisted mandible, gaping.
And as that burning chariot lowered slowly
the serpent drank the autumn twilight afterglow,
And next fixed its eyes, that I was too small to see,
on the moon coming into its ravenous view.
It devoured them all
Body after body.
Again and again,
Evening unto evening
No belly ever full, no horizon picked clean
A lost descendant of that long gone god killer
An ouroboros of flora, fauna, and sky.
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Abram Kimball
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Comments (17)
A lovely poem, well crafted, with lots of vivid imagery. I felt I was there and had some very visceral images. Good all round poem
Wonderful prose brought me to your vision.
love your word choice here! enchanting
I know exactly where that is, and live two minutes from the canyon! Great poem, captured the canyon really well.
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Very vivid! I enjoyed it. :)
I love this poem!
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Love your metaphors and descriptions, the snake was an excellent visual choice. Mysterious and cool. Check out some of my work too! I love description it’s one of my favorite parts haha. Keep writing you have something and you knoww ittt.
Thank you all for your kind comments! It has really encouraged me to put more of my work out there. I hope to share more soon!
Nice 👍❤️
Absolutely wonderful. So descriptive.
This is lovely and makes me miss this canyon more than I already did.
Beautiful, I don’t think I’ve ever come across ouroboros before, inspired choice
Excellent imagery!
I can see a time-lapse reading this :) Awesome!
excellent imagery. Very well done. I absolutely love this.
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