Today
I say goodbye
to me, myself and I
candle’s flame flickers with new light
Tonight
***
Tonight
I lay awake
watch the moon rise over
bringing tides to wash clean the sand
Silence
***
Silence
commits my heart
to a golden sunrise
color breaks free of the slow clouds
Daylight
**
Daylight
optimism
dawns, revealing choices
I’ve fought too long, hidden by try
Purpose
***
Purpose
from now, forward
clarity fills my veins
trembling, but sincere, my voice speaks
My truth
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When We Were Very Young
In another box set that my parents got me when I was younger contained four books by A.A. Milne. 'When We Were Very Young' is a collection of poems that Milne wrote for his son Christopher Robin. This is a book that is full of references to Mr. Edward Bear, but a lot of the poems give some various descriptions of life of a very young child and where, when, how and why they do what they do. The illustrations are quite cute for you can see what Christopher Robin is and may be thinking. Also, Pooh Bear does make his self-known at various points. I have read these verses many, many times over the years and each time make me feel good about myself.
By Mark Grahama day ago in Critique
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This is really lovely, Keila! I really like how you began each stanza with the element from the prior. :) Beautiful job!
Beautiful poem!
That was so beatiful!
Simple yet very profound! I would love for you to check out my work.
Good imagery. Nice theme.
Lovely prose, so moving it feels like a personal daydream to me. Beautiful work!
I love the format of this so much, it creates a really unique rhythm that works in tandem with the theme. Really nice!
I love the first line/last line format here. It definitely caught my attention. My favorite line was "color breaks free of the slow clouds..." Great work!
Lovely poetry. Thanks for sharing!
Beautiful!
Enjoyed. 😊
Insightful work, Keila!
Really enjoyed this!
This was a beautiful Crown Cinquain. I loved it. I've done one as well but I've not submitted it yet
I was sure I had read this, but I hadn't . Pure Beauty.
Beautiful❤️
Very nice
Loving this!!!
Of course, I like it! Love to see more of this from you😃