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Lei Day

A May Inspired Villanelle

By D.K. ShepardPublished 4 days ago Updated 3 days ago 1 min read
Top Story - May 2024
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Photo by Judi (my mother)

Meet me in Hawai’i the first of May

On a sandy shore of a turquoise sea

Greet me with “aloha” and wear a lei

***

On the Big Island where the palms all sway

Red lehua from the Ohia tree

Meet me in Hawai’i the first of May

***

On Maui along the Hana highway

Pluck the pink blossoms of lokelani

Greet me with “aloha” and wear a lei

***

On O’ahu at Kāneʻohe bay

A bright golden ‘ilima it must be

Meet me in Hawai’i the first of May

***

Kahoʻolawe’s hinahina gray

Greens of Kaua’i and Molokaʻi

Greet me with “aloha” and wear a lei

***

Ni’ihau’s white pūpū shells on display

Yellow kauna'oa of Lānaʻi

Meet me in Hawai’i the first of May

Greet me with “aloha” and wear a lei

Author's Note: This was written in response to Mikeydred’s May Villanelle challenge. To learn more about Lei Day checkout this "A HISTORY OF LEI DAY" from Honolulu's government site.

Villanelle
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About the Creator

D.K. Shepard

Character Crafter, Witty Banter Enthusiast, World Builder, Unpublished novelist...for now

Fantasy is where I thrive, but I like to experiment with genres for my short stories. Currently employed as a teacher in Louisville.

dkshepard.com

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  • Sandra Tena Colea day ago

    So perfectly evocative! ❣️

  • Gina C.3 days ago

    Oh, this is beautiful! Made me feel like I was in Hawaii 🥹 I've been dreaming of going back to visit for awhile now. I love the way you incorporated the beautiful and lyrical Hawaiian words. Amazing Villanelle!

  • Gosh this was so wonderfully colourful! I loved it! Congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊

  • Congrats on your top story.

  • John Cox3 days ago

    I loved this poem, DK. The language and the pacing felt like paradise!

  • Hannah Moore3 days ago

    Well done! Love the soundings of this.

  • Beautiful villanelle! And congrats on the Top Story, absolutely stunning as always.

  • always wanted to see Hawaii. Now, more than ever. congratulations on TS

  • angela hepworth4 days ago

    What a lovely villanelle!

  • Paul Stewart4 days ago

    Well..this is just a lovely lovely villanelle...I love how delicate it feels and sounds and so what my head conjures of Hawaii...love the image you shared by your mother too! Well done! and congrats on Top Story!

  • Thank you so much, a wonderful villanelle, emphasising the wonders of Lei Day

  • Rachel Deeming4 days ago

    Lovely. What a treat. I can feel the breeze and the crash of the waves.

  • Christy Munson4 days ago

    Your villanelle sings! I'd love to meet you in Hawai’i. Since I was a child I've wanted to travel there, especially to experience it as the locals do. Your poem makes me long to travel. Your mom's picture is lovely, too!

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