There was an old dilapidated and haunted house
jack entered the abandoned place with a crouse
jack heard a noice and soon evade
for no reson Jack was afraid
there were heard a great squeaks of mice
About the Creator
Karun
🌿✨ Karun, a poet weaving emotions into verses, embarked on the journey of words to unearth the beauty of feelings. In the delicate dance of ink and emotion, my poetry delves into the nexus of the human heart and the natural world.✍️
Comments (2)
Keep up the good work
hey there! This is a powerful piece, a few little criticisms: Spelling mistakes take away from the piece, for example, "noice" should be "noise" and the last sentence is pretty confusing, I would try rewriting it like: they heard the great squeaks of mice- or something along those lines powerful poem nonetheless