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Hospice in November

after Dylan Thomas

By Dane BHPublished 5 months ago Updated 5 months ago 1 min read
Runner-Up in Villanelle Challenge
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Hospice in November
Photo by Dulcey Lima on Unsplash

Each darkening day, each deepening night:

trees gone bare on the oldest hill.

we're not quite ready to lose the light.

*

the moonless sky, a glittering bite;

the house shudders in the growing chill,

each darkening day, each deepening night.

*

it's easy to say: we've stopped the fight,

let down the defenses, surrendered, but still -

we're not quite ready to lose the light.

*

it's easy to say: we know this is right.

and it's hard to bear, but bear it we will:

each darkening day, each deepening night.

*

it's easy to say: we'll be alright.

but ask me again, and the truth I'll spill:

we're not quite ready to lose the light.

*

I know one day, it'll once more be bright;

our eyes will clear, and our hearts will fill.

But we're not quite ready to lose the light,

on this darkening day, this deepening night.

nature poetry
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About the Creator

Dane BH

By day, I'm a cog in the nonprofit machine, and poet. By night, I'm a creature of the internet. My soul is a grumpy cat who'd rather be sleeping.

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www.danepoetry.com

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  • Christy Munson2 months ago

    Poignant piece. Loved it.

  • Anna 3 months ago

    Incredible work!😊

  • Alison McBain4 months ago

    You bring the feeling of late autumn to life. Always fighting to keep winter at bay.

  • Natalie Wilkinson4 months ago

    Congratulations, this one is really beautiful. Nothing feels out of place.

  • Dana Crandell4 months ago

    Poignantly beautiful. Congratulations on placing!

  • Babs Iverson4 months ago

    Congratulations on the runner up win!!!💕❤️

  • D.K. Shepard4 months ago

    Congrats! Incredibly poignant piece! Rhythmic excellence and a beautifully crafted villanelle!

  • Davina Zinn McKee5 months ago

    I can see the inspiration from the masterpiece by Dylan Thomas, yet this was so original. Beautifully done.

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