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Ferris Wheel

Can she get off this ride or is she doomed for life?

By Dharrsheena Raja SegarranPublished 2 years ago Updated about a month ago 1 min read
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Ferris Wheel
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He left her

Blindfolded in the middle of the forest

Her hands outstretched searching into nothingness

Into emptiness

Into darkness

The absence of him was so loud

~~~~~

He dumped her like trash

But she was made of glass

She tried piecing herself together

But there would always be a piece missing

Him

~~~~~

She questioned her own sanity

Replayed every memory

From the waves of laughter

To the gaslighting fights

But without closure, it was a never-ending Ferris Wheel ride

~~~~~

He was happily moving on with another girl

She bawled her eyes out every night thinking of him

The years passed by

Slowly she got over him 

Not completely 

But she believed she will eventually

~~~~~

One day, he texts her

To invite her to his wedding

She politely declined  

Her once golden heart

Is now a burnt charcoal

She just can't bless them both to be happily married

~~~~~

That same night, she dreamt of him

He said "You're the one for me"

"Then why are you marrying her?"

He failed to answer

~~~~~

She woke up 

Crying and screaming

She broke down the same way she did all those years ago

She realised he doesn't have a HEART

Yet HE mastered the ART of breaking her HEART

And she will always be on this never-ending Ferris Wheel ride

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Dharrsheena Raja Segarran

My mental health decline brought about a lot of darkness and I embraced it. It now flows out mostly as Dark Stories and Poetry.

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  • Bonnie Bowermanabout a month ago

    Beautifully done!

  • Donna Fox (HKB)5 months ago

    I still love this one!! Its impact and emotional draw is so relatable and beautifully captured here!! I love that even in a second round of reading this still has the same impact!! Great work!!

  • Denise E Lindquist7 months ago

    Thank you Dharrsheena! A great poem! Heartfelt.❤️

  • Veronica Coldiron7 months ago

    I kept hearing a ZZ Ward song when I read this so I thought I'd share it. https://youtu.be/adCt_Jmd96g

  • Mackenzie Davis10 months ago

    Oh I want to cry. The way this went surprised me and I loved seeing and feeling the roller coaster ride of emotions. I feel so badly for this speaker, whoever she is. That dream sequence on was just perfectly written. 💜

  • Pauline Fountain10 months ago

    Excellent Dharrsheena! Again thank you for writing and publishing this first poem. Your talent unleashed! As the day has progressed, I have been reading the posts on Vocal+ to a friend. Deeply moved again by your writing, he relates with lived experience: ‘She questioned her own sanity Replayed every memory From the waves of laughter To the gaslighting fights But without closure, it was a never-ending Ferris Wheel ride’ Such a Sunday to be cherished. No matter the genre you excel and inspire. Pauline 🌸

  • Donna Fox (HKB)11 months ago

    Dharrsheena, this was beautiful and heartbreaking and relatable! I feel like the lines " Her once golden heart Is now a burnt charcoal" says it all. You never forget your first heartbreak and in some cases you never forgive it either! You were able to portray such raw, passionate emotions in this poem. I am in awe of your talent! 💜

  • Lea Springerabout a year ago

    Love the HE-"HE-ART" connection you made--a real master of the art of breaking hearts. So sad and so real.

  • Jess Boyesabout a year ago

    Heartbreaking, relatable, painful, and so beautifully written. Great work!

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  • Great poem!

  • Kat Thorne2 years ago

    Love this. I think a lot of people can probably relate.

  • Cathy holmes2 years ago

    Sad, yet wonderfully written.

  • D-Donohoe2 years ago

    Beautiful and heartbreaking all in one! You capture the emotions so beautifully!

  • Denise Larkin2 years ago

    Emotionally heartfelt. Crafted beautifully with perfect storytelling ability. 'He dumped her like trash but she was made of glass' really lovely visual words here.

  • Russell Ormsby 2 years ago

    A sad, imperfection of the human animal. To get caught in a love trap by a heart that doesn't know how to get free. Set by a hunter who enjoys the chase more than the capture. Whos lack of a heart can't see the damage that he causes. Well done. A story well spun. Nice job 👍

  • very interested.

  • Babs Iverson2 years ago

    Outstanding!

  • Well written. Good use of symbolism.

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