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Birth of Worship
By Judey Kalchik Published 4 months ago • Updated 4 months ago • 1 min read
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Early man stared in horror
Cowering at the unexpected
Loss of light that
Indicated the removal of approval and the dis-
Pleasure of the All-One.
Screams, sobs, and sacrifices:
Entreaties lifted to appease; and thus: religion.
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Comments (16)
Hoooo FIRE!!! Sure that I will read this multiple times. Woohoos AND pom-poms Judey!
And much like tapping sticks together in South Dakota to keep the Bengal tigers at bay, voila! It works. This reminds me of the movie "The Invention of Lying" with Ricky Gervais.
Now this is spectacular. I really enjoyed the history you added in about how the eclipse probably caused fear and gave a rise to religion. Good luck
This is an original take Judey- using the actual event of an eclipse and linking it to something so universal as religion and belief. "Cowering at the unexpected Loss of light " is the line that stood out to me, and I like how this makes us think about what it would have been like to experience an eclipse with no scientific understanding of what was going on.
Oooo, this was extremely powerful! Loved your Acrostic!
Very vivid and powerful! Well done!
Ooooo! I like the direction you went with the challenge Judey, nicely done!! Love the moodiness of it!!
Wow, this was so powerful. lovely imagery!
Wow. Really powerfully told.
Excellent creativity. Your words selection is not ordinary. You wrote from heart.
Great entry, very creative.
Impressive!!! Loving it!!!💕❤️❤️
Most creative and nicely penned.
Soooo good! Brilliantly crafted
Wow! Surprise😉❤️ Have fun on vacation!🥰
Someone is ready for Monday. Are you in the path too? I may or may not have called it the apocalypse a few times