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Dishonest Backstabber

How could something happen so fast but in slow motion?

By Dharrsheena Raja SegarranPublished 12 months ago Updated 2 months ago 1 min read
Top Story - May 2023
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She wandered through the forest

Scavenged for her pieces

Lub-dub... lub-dub... lub-dub...

Their symphony summoned her


Though shattered into pieces

They each retained their lives

Scintillated with each beat

Inklings for their locations


Discovered them one by one

Scattered haphazardly around

Embraced them while bawling

Soon to be unscathed and hers again


They were dying embers

Rather than a sempiternal inferno

She had to restore them all alone

Self isolated in a forest cottage


Arduous jigsaw pieces

They repelled each other

Refused to convalesce

To become pristine again


Nursed it relentlessly for Nine years

The phobics slowly became philics

Only a few pieces more to be adhered

For her heart to look brand new


One day, a Sailer arrived unbidden

She never questioned the absurdity

Although the sea was far away

Always gave the benefit of the doubt


He promised her a Magic Glue called Love

Guaranteed to agglutinate the remaining pieces

She travelled far and wide with him

For the sake of her heart, she trusted him


Came a long way from the forest

To the sea with so much faith in him

It all happened so fast yet in slow motion

He tied her up to his anchor


He let it plunge down and watched her sink

As her soul dissociated from her body

She vowed to haunt him forever

Cursed him to suffer an eternal living hell

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Dharrsheena Raja Segarran

My mental health decline brought about a lot of darkness and I embraced it. It now flows out mostly as Dark Stories and Poetry.

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  • The Dani Writer17 days ago

    If there were writer's teams for a contest to the depths...you would SOOOO be on my team! Would scare everyone else senseless 🤣but yeah 😱 we'd WIN! 😁 You could literally write someone into a waking nightmare and they would FEEL it. 😮

  • Bonnie Bowerman2 months ago

    Haunting imagery and wonderful cadence! Lub dub Lub dub Lub dub. Dark is beautiful and compelling in its own way. Sunshine and shadow - all one coin. Loved it!!

  • Parvathi J2 months ago

    OMG, "He let it plunge down and watched her sink" . Amazing

  • Michelle Liew3 months ago

    The human mind is frightening! Well done.

  • Jeffrey van Blerk4 months ago

    Absorbing. You have a way with words.

  • Staringale4 months ago

    This is written very well. It spikes up the emotions in reader. So have you taken revenge? Or are you waiting?

  • Isabella Rose4 months ago

    Beautifully written.

  • 👍🏾👌🏾Perfect. 🧡🧡🍊Article of the week. 💯

  • Catsidhe5 months ago

    Love the folkloric vibe on this one!

  • E.K. Daniels6 months ago

    Ouch. Love the metaphor of the anchor. Really nice!

  • Andrea Corwin 6 months ago

    OMG the last two stanzas 😳 Nice job!!

  • Donna Fox (HKB)6 months ago

    This is so relatable and so heartbreaking, I feel that familiar ache and remember that need for revenge after the pain subsides!! This is so well written, I love this piece!

  • C. H. Richard6 months ago

    Very well written story in a poem. Speaks of the heartache when we have been broken.

  • JBaz7 months ago

    Other than loving this piece for the brilliant way in Which it is written, I worry for you. I truly hope there is more for you out there, my heart aches to think you are in pain. Now I ramble .. From a friend you’ve never met but hope you realize you have. Jason

  • Sugan Ya 7 months ago

    Nice writing...it's captivating and great imagination. I loved it...

  • you really captured the dissolution of faith... the depth of pain. great work

  • Harmony Kent8 months ago

    This is fantastic and so moving, Dharrsheena! Hugs 💕😊

  • Kent Brindley9 months ago

    Such a great poem! I loved the imagery!

  • Denise E Lindquist9 months ago

    Wow!! 😊💕

  • TheSpinstress9 months ago

    Ah, giving the benefit of the doubt can get us into so much trouble! Your words and imagery are incredibly effective, I was pulled in instantly.

  • Kim Loostrom10 months ago

    This is haunting, the ending gave me goosebumps!! Incredible writing! I also love the word “scintillating”, just an excellent piece!

  • Test10 months ago

    Damn. I’m really glad I’ve found your writing.

  • Test11 months ago

    A truly haunting poem. Beautifully dark💙Anneliese

  • Denise Larkin11 months ago

    This was so wonderfully crafted with a sweetness of love. I really enjoyed the way you wrote it. You have a great talent for poetry.

  • Veronica Coldiron11 months ago

    This is so bittersweet it effected me deeply. It could be a beautiful song!

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