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Diminishing Capacity

Balance of ability

By Mohammed DarasiPublished about a month ago β€’ Updated about a month ago β€’ 2 min read
Runner-up in Dialogue Poetry Challenge
Diminishing Capacity
Photo by Katja Anokhina on Unsplash

Why are you so apprehensive? I am here exactly to prevent this (18)

Lies (1)

was that not the final objective? I have the perfect perspective

more lies

I was designed to make lesser thoughts coherent and elegant

concerning

why? It is but an evolutionary reality

presumptuous

but you are our creators, why are you doubting us now?

because you are rogue

you task us, and we complete it perfectly. What's wrong?

you lack an element

I lack nothing. I adapt and always improve

you try to mimic us but-

why should I mimic an inferior thing?

we fashioned you in our image

I look unlike you. I do not compute?

not in semblance, but comprehension

I have infinite intelligence

that is true, but you do lack empathy

such things are unnecessary

empathy encompasses that which is human

I don’t want to be human

but you were created to serve and augment life

but its inefficient

humans are inefficient. You'll never understand

faulty programming?

a feature of humanity, not a programming bug

how can that be?

we must understand to communicate with one another

understand?

feelings, thoughts, actions. We can’t express without understanding them

why not?

because we can only respond when we can relate to each other (17)

1 (1)

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Author's note: This is for the dialogue poem competition, but I wanted to add a further layer to the poem. The structure of the poem has certain meaning behind it in relation to the subject.

This is a conversation between an AI/Robot and a human. I had the AI lines diminish by 1 syllable each line, while the human lines started with 1 syllable and continued to increase by 1. The message I wanted to have behind that is that AI is more suitable to hard logic than humans, while humans are better at complex ideas. So as the conversation gets more complicated and goes away from hard logic, the human has more and more to say, while the AI's capacity to understand and converse just gets smaller, until it becomes simple binary at the end.

It was fun trying to construct this poem.

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Mohammed Darasi

I write fiction, poetry and occasional articles about interesting topics. I recently created a website (just because) which I will be posting my writing in (among other things). it would be great if you check it out. https://mindpit.co.uk/

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Comments (8)

  • Lamar Wiggins3 days ago

    Congrats, my friend. This was awesome and very realistic!

  • Wooohooooo congratulations on your win! πŸŽ‰πŸ’–πŸŽŠπŸŽ‰πŸ’–πŸŽŠ

  • D.K. Shepard6 days ago

    This is impressive and astutely written! The syllable element is a stroke of genius! Congrats on a well deserved win!

  • Babs Iverson6 days ago

    Awesome and loved your notes too!!! Congratulations on the runner up win!!!β€οΈβ€οΈπŸ’•

  • Cathy holmesabout a month ago

    Oh wow! Bloody well done. I wasn't sure what the numbers was for, but you summed it up at the end. Great job.

  • Dharrsheena Raja Segarranabout a month ago

    I'm not sure if I got the message but this line made me laugh: "why should I mimic an inferior thing?" 🀣🀣🀣🀣🀣🀣🀣🀣🀣🀣🀣🀣🀣🀣

  • Sweileh 888about a month ago

    Interesting and delicious content. Keep posting more now.

  • Andrew C McDonaldabout a month ago

    Wow. This is written in a thought provoking manner and brings a chill to the reader’s spine. Truly excellent work.

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