Deprived of freedom
For Randy Baker's 30 Prompt Challenge
I'm studying
lots of things
that are and aren't useful.
Some of them
are completely bullshit...
like I can tell you now
that I won't need 'em in my life.
I know, that's all I have to do,
but fuck it!
I'm young only once
I wanna go out,
but the school's holding me back,
like a prison where's nothing but lack
of freedom.
When I'm in the dorm
I feel the opposite way
like a bird in a small cage,
which doesn't have the chance to escape,
can't break out
hilarious rules...
They think
they can do anything
that's bad for us,
taking advantage
of our vulnerability,
because this is how life works...
There's no humility
anymore...
For Randy Baker's 10th Prompt:
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I First Saw Him
When I first saw him sitting on the wall, relaxed and looking out over the water, I was sure he wasn't a local. Not including children, there are only about 250 or 300 of us in this area full-time, though that number is ten-fold in the summer, and I know everyone at least by sight or by family resemblance. And yet, the way he sat looked familiar and started my mind sorting and discarding among the families I knew, not quite like this one, not quite like that one.
By Natalie Wilkinson7 days ago in Fiction
Comments (10)
Raw and emotional! Kind of like a teenager. lol This certainly fits the bill for the #10 prompt. Good job!
I hated school but I loved the learning. Learning is key even if you never use it.
It doesnt matter what we learn at school - we need to be learning HOW to learn. How to appraise information, how to hear beyond our echo chambers, how to make use of our brains.
Education is indeed a conditioning program arising from the establishment. Take what you need and leave the rest to those who like to stand in lines. Always think for yourself! Well-wrought!
I felt the visceral realness and honesty you poured into this. You are only young once, follow your dreams whether that's at school or someplace else. Live in the moment and enjoy your youth. But keep an eye on your future. Save back a little to plan for it. Because you will be there one day. Loved your poem, great work.
Good job, Anna!
This was so poignant and emotional! Loved your poem so much!
I also learned a lot. After 45 years, I can say a lot of unnecessary things, but also a lot of useful ones. What we don't know at a young age is what we're going to need in life. No one can know that. When I was younger, my job was to learn and I often didn't like it. Now I have to work, but I would love to learn again...
This is how life works .... Ouch. I felt that. I love this poem. Its restless and powerful.
Brilliant work, Anna.