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Diving into unknown waters
Innocent as pie
Slowly, something starts to crack
The surface of my mind
Reality has slipped my grip
And time passes away
Can anybody hear me
Through this murky sea of gray?
I pull myself up toward the air
Out of the dark and brine–
No one sees the difference, but today, my mind is mine
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Zero grammar & spelling mistakes
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Comments (12)
This was excellent writing
AMAZING 💜
I love the end. I can't tell you how often I get lost in fantasy, but it is such a freeing time. I loved this!
That was such a liberating ending. But today, mine is mine! Loved that line so much! Congratulations on your Top Story!
Amazing work, Joelle! I love how this takes us on a mysterious adventure and ends with triumph ❤️ Congratulations on Top Story!! 😍
Congratulations on top story 👏🏼👏🏼🎊
I saw this and gave it a heart and insights when it was first published but for some reason did not comment! Congrats on the TS!
This is one of the best I have read for the challenge. Very well done and congrats on the Top Story.
Wow this one is hot 💯
❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️
❤️❤️ I have definitely felt like this too. Loved the words and also the way you structured your poem here.
Love the layers of depth here and that very powerful last line! 💫