we were supposed to be closer to chaos
from the stuff of disorder we were cast
we are a stream of pure consciousness
the vision is wide the reach is vast
press the button at the appropriate time
you wait; it will be like watching tele in a dream
you won’t even need to imagine the jackboot
violent silence forever with fresh screened screams
we were supposed to be closer to suns
from the stuff of light we thrive and grow
absorbing both the light and the dark
chasing eternal shadows as we glow
an overwhelming crescendo of finely tuned curses
this time they have truly outdone themselves
only looking when there was nothing to find
we didn’t start to get lost until we found ourselves
About the Creator
Brenton F
How much is not not enough and how little is too much?
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Comments (3)
Absorbing both the light and dark. That was really deep! Loved your poem!
“An overwhelming crescendo of finely tuned curses”— wow. Beautiful line. I’m still thinking about this one, unraveling the intricacies of each verse and tying them into a larger meaning. Very profound writing.
Fascinating and thought provoking. This would be a great 1st page for a science fiction story. Well done.