Diving to the depths of the deep,
dark ocean to straddle my fears;
I feel heavy, steady water
pressure mingle with frantic tears.
I learn to breathe underwater,
when the mermaid appears shining
blue light, a crystal path revealed
to me, silently sighing. “Oh!”
I gasp as she takes my cold hand
safely, softly in hers to lead the way
through currents, where I cannot stand.
Before me, my blurred vision fades.
She helps me find my idle feet,
surfacing with a solid kick,
washed ashore by the singing waves,
unrelenting in their perfect pitch.
I open my eyes to find me,
supine in the sand, tightly wrapped
in the beautiful bright blue haze,
determined to exist unmasked.
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KJ Aartila
A writer of words in northern WI with a small family and a large menagerie.
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Comments (7)
Wow this was ethereal I felt as though I were in the water. Beautiful
Whoaaa, such vivid imageries! Very beautifully written!
I found that the imagery almost make you feel as you are actually there! This is a great poem!
Gorgeous piece. Well done.
Beautiful job! I love this so much; I am enchanted by the way this started out with a dark feel and then slowly brightened up with hope and inspiration at the end.
Wonderful use of imagery :) I loved the ending, great work!
This is a beautiful piece pf marine poetry