Behind Closed Doors

The way you’ve written this feels so appropriate- fast-paced and almost without thinking, rapid-fire words. “Beasts awoke hungrily Wanted their appetites pleased” is a clever way to show how desires influence actions. Smart and harrowing imagery.

I'm sorry about the trauma that you faced, My Morbid Friend. Parents have a responsibility to put the children's needs first, and unfortunately, that didn't happen for you. *Healing hugs and love*

Congrats on the top story!!❤️🎉🎉🎉

This poem is a work of art… ❤️✨🕊️ Sadly parents are often traumatised children themselves, desperately trying to feel loved and wanted… and they get drawn into such relationships. There was cheating in my parents marriage all the way through… neither of them knew love.. it was all about toxic attachment. And no one to blame. They didn’t have the awareness we do today. They didn’t have the same privilege we have to read psychology, to understand trauma and how things affected us… They lived in more reactive states…. With far less awareness… Always more love is the answer… more compassion, less judgement 🕊️

I forgot how sultry this one is and then the note at the end rattled me, I remember reading it but forgot some details since I've last looked at the poem! I love the imagery and pacing of the poem! The sun, the moon, the truth line was my favourite this time around!! You tell such a tantalizing tale Dharrsheena!

Wow! This is powerful. I love: "Three things can't stay hidden/The sun, the moon, the truth." In my future book, if I give you credit and perhaps a small amount of cash, may I use this line? BTW, thank you for leaving a comment for "Vocal Inspirations!" The comment disappeared. LOL. However, the Reader Insight is still there. We have a mutual admiration society!!!

No amount of soap Can wash away the sins Three things can't stay hidden The sun, the moon, the truth this was amazing, sorry for your trauma❤️

It's a thought provoking piece!! Well done!!!🥰💕🙌

I was enjoying the poem to be honest haha but the personal story at the end got me to introspect on the subject. I'm sorry for your trauma. Know that it wasn't your fault. Great poem.

Love the brevity contrasting with the far reaching, deeply seated, long lasting emotions and hurt. I was surprised by the ending and also the middle; at first I assumed it was the beginning of a morally good relationship! What a ride. I’m so sorry it was based on personal experiences, though; I cannot imagine all that went into this, but can certainly feel it from these verses. Well done! 💜

Wonderfully expressed words. I can see the trauma.

You are so extremely talented it’s unbelievable. I will be rereading this for the rest of the night lol.

Dharrsheena, this was raw and so emotional. I love the seduction in the beginning and the way you reflected the immediate regret afterwards. It was a whole rollercoaster of a journey you took us through! The lines "No amount of soap Can wash away the sins" cuts so deep! Also thank you for sharing an intimate part of yourself with the reader, it was very brave of you! 💜

You can really pack an emotional punch- and some surprising twists- in a few words.

Emotionally intense, yet beautiful.

Very well written with a great message.

beautifully done. cheating is a horrible thing that I'm lucky to never have experienced, but I know it hurts a lot more than just the two involved, and you really captured that

Loved the message behind this. Also, loved the play on words and literary devices used. Nice.

Really well written and the emotions I can feel it come off the screen

Powerful.

This was some good writing! Thanks for sharing this poem, I enjoyed reading every bit of it, and I loved the personal touch at the end.

By restricting the syllables and word count in each line you managed to convey the furtiveness and guilty thrill that is infidelity. Well done.

Loved the twist at the end. Great work!

Lust is human nature. But, there must always be self-control. Nice poem.

Good one infact so true