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Are You Serious? Get Out!

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By Kelli Sheckler-AmsdenPublished 5 months ago Updated 5 months ago 1 min read
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Are You Serious? Get Out!
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Mr sandman, this isn’t my dream,

looks are not what’s important to me.

Rose clover lips - don’t make me feel rested.

I’ll sleep with the fan and deal with mild congestion.

*

Sandman, leave me alone,

I’m doing just fine down here, on my own.

Please turn down that blasted beam.

Mr sandman, I need some zzzzzz’s.

*

Sandman, you know what I need?

A good nights rest, so I can quit the visine.

I’ve had enough of your -romance and glitter -

I want to sleep all night and not use the shi****

*

Sandman, I’m sorry, I’m sure you mean well.

But, take all your promise’s and go straight to……

well,

Ok, maybe one thing…

I want a kingsized comfy bed spring.

*

Sandman, get out of my room,

pawning your friends, at this hour is rude.

The only thing I need is your disappearing -

Unless you’ve got something for deep REM-ing

*

Sandman, let’s make a deal,

If you go away, I’ll agree to meet Neal.

Dude, for now I want to sleep.

Mr sandman- bring me,

Please, please bring me,

Mr sandman bring me - some zzzzzz’s.

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Kelli Sheckler-Amsden

Telling stories my heart needs to tell <3 life is a journey, not a competition

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  • Colt Henderson5 months ago

    I enjoyed the humor in this. Mr. Sandman never brings sleep for me either.

  • Scott Wade5 months ago

    Awesome. Congrats Top Story. WooHoo. 💕

  • I loved the rhythm and feel of this

  • Heather Hubler5 months ago

    Like others, I was humming along to this all while nodding my head in complete agreement! Great work :) Hope you got some zzzz's.

  • Caroline Jane5 months ago

    😆😆😆 fantastic!

  • Angelina F. Thomas5 months ago

    Excellent work! Keep up the glorious work that you do! Thank you you are full of insight and great story structure and plot. I am proud of you. vocal.media/authors/angelina-f-thomas-efubye0i1y please check me out online at vocal.media use my author tag/link and read my work. I wish my peers online at vocal.media would send me pledges and tips so I can return the favor! idk if it will ever happen. BOL to us and the universe!! Good day.

  • Lightning Bolt5 months ago

    ❤️❤️❤️

  • Definitely can relate, love this…

  • Deidre Melson5 months ago

    How did you know how to describe my nights! Hahahaha!

  • Morgana Miller5 months ago

    Haha this is great. I love the voice and the genius disappearing/REMing slant rhyme

  • Congratulations on your Top Story! Loved the rhyme and humour in your poem. Made me chuckle. You did a fantastic job!

  • Kat Thorne5 months ago

    Oh god, I really feel this one this week. I've been doing a terrible job of respecting my need for sleep. Congrats on the top story!

  • Kendall Defoe5 months ago

    Interesting take on a classic... Now try 'Sh-Boom, Sh-Boom'! ;)

  • Pam Reeder5 months ago

    This was fantastic! I literally sang it in my head as I read it. LOL Job well done!

  • Brenton F5 months ago

    That was a pleasure to read and now I have The Chordettes in my earbuzz!

  • Babs Iverson5 months ago

    Superb!!! Loving your creative Sandman poem!!!👏💖😊💕

  • Rick Henry5 months ago

    Very clever... I love "Mr. Sandman" what a great song... Especially by Trio - Dolly, Linda, and Emmylou.

  • C. Rommial Butler5 months ago

    You got a chuckle out of me. Your rhythm scheme was well orchestrated!

  • Cathy holmes5 months ago

    Lol. This is great.

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