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Sticky Fingers

A Micro Heist Challenge Submission

By Ryan SmithPublished 11 months ago 1 min read
Top Story - June 2023
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Sticky Fingers
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The lights were out for ten minutes before David made his move. There could be no mistakes. He had played this out in his head until he could do it blindfolded. He rehearsed when no one was looking until he knew every creaky bit of the floor, where to hug the walls and the blindspots to pause in and wait for any signs of danger. He had been denied far too long, and tonight was the night that he got what he wanted.

As he tiptoed past the last room in the hall, light spilled out under the door, a shadow sweeping across it. David froze. It was all for nothing. He held his breath until he was about to burst, and the light turned off. He felt a pang of guilt, but he came too far to give up.

He crept into the room that held the treasure, calming the electric excitement in his belly. With steady hands, he slowly opened the door. There they were, his for the taking. He would leave enough that they would never know.

Sudden blinding light made his head sank in defeat.

“David,” his mother said, “you put those cookies back right now.”

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Ryan Smith

I'm a good dad, a decent writer, and a terrible singer.

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  • Ruth Stewart11 months ago

    I love this; I remember as a kid learning the squares on the carpet that "squeaked". Well written, well done.

  • Holly Pheni11 months ago

    This was too cute! Got yourself a subscriber.

  • Alexandria Stanwyck11 months ago

    I love how you wrote it so you didn't reveal what was actually happening until the end. I thought for a moment David was going to be stealing someone's jewelries or money.

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  • Dana Crandell11 months ago

    I was leaning toward David being the husband, since it sounds like a scene that would play out at my home. A great story, Ryan! Congratulations!

  • JBaz11 months ago

    Cookies, they’re worth the effort Congratulations

  • Lamar Wiggins11 months ago

    lol. Almost got away... They must have been some irresistible cookies. Great take on the challenge, Ryan... And congrats!!!

  • Kendall Defoe 11 months ago

    Didn't know we had the same mom!

  • Ward Norcutt11 months ago

    congrats on your story, Ryan!

  • Mackenzie Davis11 months ago

    Lol, “he had been denied for too long.” Love that! Such a fun read. 💜

  • Cathy holmes11 months ago

    lol. oooh, that ending. Poor David. Great job, Ryan.

  • Babs Iverson11 months ago

    Too cute!!! Well done!!!❤️❤️💕

  • L.C. Schäfer11 months ago

    Oooh the little scamp! I say "little", would be funnier if he was her husband 😜

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