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A wish of the first snow

By Ellen StedfeldPublished 3 months ago 1 min read
Second Place in Snow Micro Challenge
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The boy sculpted a man from the New Snow. A snowman. His lonely tears fell against the frost, a smear of blood from his bruises, the salt of his sweat, and warm breath that summoned life from the barren landscape, as frantic flakes swirled down around them. He wrapped his scarf around the stoic standing figure, tenderly as though this simple visage were his elder brother, and ardently wished for the company of a true friend. A floating spirit, who'd long been lost within a cracked lake's frigid waters, whose essence had become one with the winter season, he encountered this vessel crafted by the boy and found it to be a fine resemblance of his former self, a suitable resting place for his soul. Boy, spirit, and winter's magic coincided in that moment. The snowman shed a tear in tune with the lonely boy's sadness, and a small pearl of ice dropped onto the boy's head. His cold hands, like those of a corpse returned to waking, unfolded and hugged the boy with a comfort the child had never before known. "I am with you now" the young man whispered to the little magician. "I will protect you, and take you away from this place, to wherever you want to go." The boy looked up, amazed that his desperate dream had come true. He remembered then, the stories told of shaping a wish from the first snowfall. And now he believed in his heart that anything could be possible.

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About the Creator

Ellen Stedfeld

Perpetually immersed in drawing, illustration, and creative experiments, at live events and @EllesaurArts.com

Community arts in NYC/Queens -- LIC Arts Open festival May 15-19th 2024

Love participating in challenges to motivate new work!

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    The story invoked strong personal emotions

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  • ROCK 3 months ago

    Congratulations on your wonderful win! Well done!

  • Joe O’Connor3 months ago

    This was a lovely line to read “who'd long been lost within a cracked lake's frigid waters”, and shows us a lot. I liked the joyful reunion, and the idea of magic in snow. Nicely done Ellen😊

  • Tracy Kreuzburg 3 months ago

    Beautiful. Congrats!

  • D.K. Shepard3 months ago

    What a great micro! Congrats!

  • Very well done. You poured a lot into a small word count.

  • Thanks for the encouragements everyone, thrilled to have placed in the challenge! I've also been reflecting on the creative process, hope to follow up with further thoughts & discussion. Fortuitously, I will be in an art show tonight (March 2nd) on the theme of "Winter Blues" if anyone based in NYC wants to get in a wintry mood, talk about our writing, or have your portrait done as a snow-person... https://www.instagram.com/reel/C4AQBGluFtT/?igsh=OHZvMXl6YzZodnIw

  • Carly Bush3 months ago

    Wow. So powerful. Congratulations on Second Place; well-deserved, definitely.

  • Novel Allen3 months ago

    Deep and insightful story. Sad and yet hopeful. Congrats.

  • Christy Munson3 months ago

    Impactful from start to finish, every word an ingredient in a spell. I am touched and inspired to write -- compliments I hope you take as fully as they are intended. Brilliant work!

  • Test3 months ago

    Congratulations!!! Beautiful story.

  • Rachel Deeming3 months ago

    Super heart-warming story, which left me warm and strangely optimistic.

  • A. Lenae3 months ago

    This story holds such magic and tenderness, the sweetness of a fairytale in such lovely packaging. "He remembered then, the stories told of shaping a wish from the first snowfall" - beautiful and an example of how your language in this is special and speaks like a cozy classical tale. Congratulations on your achievement!

  • A. J. Schoenfeld3 months ago

    Beautiful story with the right amount of whimsy. Congratulations!

  • Lamar Wiggins3 months ago

    Congratulations on a well-deserved win! Loved your story! 🥇

  • Congratulations Ellen on your win in the Snow Micro challenge!!!

  • JBaz3 months ago

    This is a truly touching tale of hope and desperation. I could feel the love between the two. Well done and Congratulations

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