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Necromancer's Neoteny

Maturation

By Thavien YliasterPublished 6 months ago 2 min read
Top Story - October 2023
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During Ajax's initiation he's brought to a conflict of interests. Whether Ajax likes it or not, tonight a legend will be born. The song used is by the composer Darren Curtis Music titled "Demented Nightmare." | https://youtube.com/@DarrenCurtisMusic?si=HG5ci6Wiv__6AyVm | https://youtu.be/VmJ5C5l3WWg?si=Wy-yuBYOP-rD1ALb

"First you must give before you can take," Ganelon's words echoed in Ajax's eardrum. "You must loose so that you desire to regain."

Loose he had, for Ajax did every sacrifice that was necessary of him prior to initiation. Though handicapping himself wasn't his original agenda, it was done in order for him to learn the importance of life and its many natural blessings.

"What have you lost?" Ganelon circled him, trying to unnerve Ajax as easily as possible.

"Vision in my right eye."

"And?"

"Flexor retinaculum, Achilles, patella, lower ribs..."

"And?!"

"Kidney, virility, family, friendships."

"And what have you gained?" Ganelon stopped, pressing so close that Ajax could smell the smoky scent of incense and charcoal emanating off his pores.

"Understanding. All that I've lost made me stronger. All that I've lost made me learn in order to regain it."

"Have you truly regained everything?"

Ajax's head turned downwards, thoughts of her flashed in his mind. He knew she'd be happier without him. Yet, that's not what he wanted to believe. Still, he chose not to object. That was his decision. This was his path.

"No."

"Good." Ganelon chuckled slowly at first, then into a violent fit of laughter. Soon the surrounding audience joined in.

Peering beneath his cloak, Ajax may have healed all the damage that he laid waste to himself, but the scars would never heal.

Placing a rusty blade within his hand, Ganelon gestured towards Ajax's sole comforter. Picking his head off the floor, he turned his head queerly, questioning Ajax's motives.

Gritting his teeth, he'd threw the blade down in rejection of the initiation's rules. "Fuck that. Come, Baskerville. We're leaving."

As the two exited the chapel a member stood up, but Ganelon placed a hand, stopping her. "He'll come back. They always do."

Traipsing through the woods, Baskerville bounded with glee meanwhile Ajax sulked. Where would he go now? He had no family, no home, and now no sect to belong to. The paladins wouldn't want him, and neither would the clergy nor the academics. Where was he to turn?

As he pondered, his goosepimples erected. Animosity filled the air. The trees' shadows clawed out for him, hoisting him with unworldly strength, suffocating him. Panicking, Baskerville attacked the trees' bark. His bite proved useless.

Cervus', sciuridae', strigiformes', and vulpes' skeletons emerged from the leaf litter, shadows filling their forms where their bones could not.

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Like a sacrificial lamb, Baskerville was sent to a slaughter. Barely hanging on to a thread of life, Ajax was forced to look on, hearing Baskerville's whimpers as he fought for his very life. Yet, Baskerville couldn't kill that which is already dead.

Once enough blood was shed, Ajax was released. Crawling to comfort his only friend, he let out a blood curdling howl. Seeing Baskerville's open chest cavity, Ajax reached for his still beating heart, praying fervently as he gripped it. Yanking it out, Ajax scarfed it down his throat.

Craving vengeance, Ajax cried.

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"BASKERVILLE! FETCH ME THEIR SOULS!"

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Thavien's Tokens: "This microfiction is crafted for Matthew Fromm's High Fantasy Challenge." Details are linked below.

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Thavien Yliaster

Thank You for stopping by. Please, make yourself comfortable. I'm a novice poet, fiction writer, and dream journalist.

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  • Mother Combs3 months ago

    This is a wonderful microfiction. It left me craving more

  • Celia in Underland3 months ago

    Brilliantly crafted. I was completely gripped throughout!-your descriptions are fantastic!

  • Mariann Carroll6 months ago

    Impressive 🏆🏆🏆🏆

  • Mariann Carroll6 months ago

    This was so expressive 🫶🏽👌🏆

  • Veronica Coldiron7 months ago

    Great job! Congratulations!!

  • Hannah Moore7 months ago

    Oh dear god, you didnt.... He lost it all, but drew a line, and then you sucked the line away and shattered it! This is either the beginning of a very big story - or a very short story of hopelessness.

  • Heather Hubler7 months ago

    Congrats on Top Story AND winning Matthew's challenge :) So much story packed into this micro. But you ripped out my heart along with Baskerville's, not man's best friend, noooo, lol!

  • Stephanie Hoogstad7 months ago

    This was a very powerful read. Congratulations on winning Matthew’s challenge.

  • JBaz7 months ago

    Congratulations This was a wonderful read

  • StoryholicFinds7 months ago

    Congratulations ❤️

  • Donna Fox (HKB)7 months ago

    Thavien, I love the quotes you used as an opening line to this story!! Such a great way to bring the reader into the story and set the scene!! I also like the perspective you chose for the narrator, the way you give us extra insights to the scene we are watching! It felt engaging and really drew me into the story! This was intense such a great read to get into the spooky season!! Nicely done Thavien!! Also congratulation on Top Story!!

  • JBaz7 months ago

    Very thoughtful and well written, the saga continues. But Baskerville…why?

  • Rob Angeli7 months ago

    That was an amazing and harrowing little piece, congratulations on Top Story! I like the names too, very eclectic.

  • Matthew Fromm7 months ago

    congrats on the top story! I believe that makes 5 from the challenge.

  • Baskerville 😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭

  • Addison M7 months ago

    Excellent little necrofiction. Very nice.

  • Babs Iverson7 months ago

    Wonderful microfiction!!! ❤️❤️💕

  • Matthew Fromm7 months ago

    annnnnd now I have to go pet my dog...entered.

  • Lamar Wiggins7 months ago

    Wow! That was pretty intense. I want more, lol.

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