That will be eighteen pounds and thirty pence, please.
Shakey Jake, Bisdale's resident smackhead, pushed his grubby fingers into the pockets of his greasy parker and rummaged amongst God-knows-what for the required coin.
Jayne watched patiently, trying not to gag as dank wafts of stale fags slapped their way over the cash desk between them.
Aha! After much muttering, Shakey brought from the bowels of his coat a mauled twenty-pound note and handed it to her. Sanitiser ready in her peripheral vision, she took it and handed over the goods.
Thanks. He winked.
Bye, she hissed through gritted teeth.
With the smell of him lodged in her nostrils, she looked up at the shiny, closed-circuit plastic eye recording her every move.
She caught sight of herself in the perspex security screen and looked down at her feet. Her pretty pink shoes dangled next to a large grey safe that seemed to be screaming out like a fat man in misery.
Fuck. This. Shit.
This was not her life.
These were not her people.
Four clicks of the safe dial later, and in seconds, she had stuffed her bag full, and an Uber was en route.
Mexico... Get ready for Jayne.
About the Creator
Caroline Jane
Warm-blooded vertebrate, domesticated with a preference for the wild. Howls at the moon and forages on the dark side of it. Laughs like a hyena. Fuelled by good times and fairy dust. Writes obsessively with no holes barred.
Reader insights
Nice work
Very well written. Keep up the good work!
Top insight
Excellent storytelling
Original narrative & well developed characters
Comments (5)
I'd missed this one, I dropped in via my profile links, that was a fun take on the challenge, very Speedy Gonzalez
That stinky wanker drove her straight over! Well-written and descriptive, which is tricky in a micro. Good job! Go Jayne! 🇲🇽
Brilliantly written! Awesome storytelling and character development my friend; I felt like I was at the store watching everything my self! Great work!
As always, this is awesome!!! Loved it!!!❤️❤️💕
Oh yeah!!! I wanted to yell, 'fuck this shit' right along with her. Go Jayne!! This was a fantastic story. Drew me right in. Great work!!