Breathless from running, and struggling to maintain his growing anxiety, he raced toward her home. Best friends since forever, they had shared every major life event like brother and sister, but they weren’t. They had gathered many more of those small things that only had meaning through a shared lifetime. They would always be friends and as her friend, he was once again hurrying to comfort her through her latest drama.
Entering her bedroom, he was stunned to find her sitting demurely on her bed, with her legs crossed but completely naked.
I thought she really knew me.
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Phil Flannery
Damn it, I'm 61 now, which means I'm into my fourth year on Vocal, I have an interesting collection of stories. I love the Challenges and enter, when I can, but this has become a lovely hobby.
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Fyra and Sword
Author's note: This follows Heart of Steel Lor'kan thrust his blade forward with such speed and precision Naythan barely whipped his blade to dash it to one side. Lor'kan used the momentum to bring his sword around his head in a slash right and left, right, left, right left battering Naythan as he blocked frantically backing up as he did so. He was losing too much ground too fast. Trying to regain the initiative, Naythan caught Lor'kan's last cut, lifted his elbow to angle the point of his blade towards Lor'kan's face and thrust forward, keeping his blade clashed with Lor'kan to protect himself even as he attacked. It worked, Lor'kan's assault pattern was broken and he backed up a step to avoid Naythan's point and gain distance from him, giving Naythan crucial seconds to regain his composure and go on the offensive.
By Tomos Jackson7 days ago in Fiction
Comments (11)
Wooo, what happen next ? Is there a part 2 ???
Ooh, this is so good! You really got me, I was not expecting that 😅 Love it!
Oh, I love when those last lines drop and change everything. This was fantastic. Great work :)
I thought I had read this, well I have now, and loved the finale
Wow! What a visual ending. 😎
Wow, I like the Wrenching...
Really well done especially the ending
Very good, Phil. I loved the twist.
Good one... Keep going
that was an unexpected twist - both for the story and the boy. Nice work!
Lol, that was unexpected! Brilliant story!