Aquariummed
This is for the Vocal "Aquarium" challenge
This is for the Vocal "Aquarium" challenge, hopefully not exactly what you would expect. This is a chat fiction story, I have not done one for a while so hopefully, it will suit, for this particular situation.
Aquariummed (Made up word for this guy's particular situation)
He woke.
He couldn’t move.
His whole body was gaffer taped.
He looked up, and there was a lid with some lights and tubes dropping out of it. He looked to his sides and ahead but couldn't see behind, but all the sides were glass, and he could hear a dripping noise. He felt like he was lying on sand or gravel.
Them: Ah you are awake
Him: What the hell, where am I? Let me out. Why am I here? What’s happening?
Them: Calm Down, Calm Down. We only want you to tell us what we want to know. We are the Kafka brothers and we desire some information from you.
Him: Let me go, What do you want to know?
Kafka Brothers: You know what we want. We asked you nicely and you never told us, so we drugged your coffee, tied you with gaffer tape and put you into our aquarium. Our fish are not too happy we had to move them into the bath. You know an aquarium needs to be filled with water so we will soon turn on the tap. Not too fast of course we want you to tell us what we want to know. before it fills up.
He was trying to process this. The Kafka Brothers (who he had never met before) wanted information from him and had him trapped in their aquarium, which they intended to fill with water with him still in it. He wasn’t sure that they would stop the water if he told them what they wanted to know, and he didn’t have a clue what they wanted to know so how could he tell them what they wanted? He was worried.
Him: Can you tell me what you want? If I don’t know what you want how can I tell you what you want?
The water was dripping faster
Kafka Brothers: You know what you have to tell us, we don’t know what we want but we know you have to tell us, hopefully before the aquarium fills up.
Him: If I tell you what you want will you let me out?
Kafka Brothers: We hadn’t considered that
Him: Well will you? If you are going to drown me anyway why should I tell you?
Kafka Brothers: Let us think
Him: The aquarium is filling up and I am getting worried. I know a lot and I can tell you many things but need to know what you need to know.
Kafka Brothers: We are thinking
Him: You must switch the water off, take the lid off the aquarium, rake me out and free me from the gaffer tape.
Kafka Brothers: That’s not what we wanted to hear,
Him: You said you didn’t know what you wanted to hear, so how do you know you didn’t want to hear that
Kafka Brothers: You know we did this yesterday
Him: What?
Kafka Brothers: We will do this tomorrow
Him: What are you on about?
Kafka Brothers: You murdered those innocent kittens, drowned in a sack weighed down with bricks, The almighty doesn't like cruelty to animals so you have been sentenced to drowning in our aquarium for eternity. Once you pass out you will wake up tomorrow and have this all again. Fitting don’t you think?
He remembered, he had drowned the kittens and then remembered driving home and something about going off a bridge. He suddenly realised he must have been killed.
Him: Am I dead?
Kafka Brothers: You are
Him: Can I redeem myself?
Kafka Brothers: You can
Him: How?
Kafka Brothers: Tell us what we want to know ………..
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Comments (10)
Did not expect that ending... sharp and to the point... bam! Love the art!
Chat fiction is awesome. Good story, Mike. Unpredictable yet satisfying. Great work.
I don't know how I missed yours. This was really good!
Whoaaa I loved this. Certainly did not expect the way it turned out. Fantastic job with the challenge and the chat fiction!
Love the Title & the Unique storytelling!
This was creative and different with so many twists! What a great story and a very enjoyable read :)
It was an enjoyable read, written in an engaging manner.
Wow! This was funny, then it was horrifying, and terribly sad, and overall a very unique stand-out.
nice one. I like it.
I like the story! :)