Fiction logo

Afterwards

Microfiction Challenge

By Dean F. HardyPublished 10 months ago 1 min read
24
Afterwards
Photo by Alexander Possingham on Unsplash

The promise of rain trickled through the balcony door. It danced pleasantly between them. Pink and sweaty and naked.

-Did'ya get there?

-Duke, why d'ya always gotta do that huh?

-What, I'm curious..

-Askin' just ruins the fuckin' mood man!

She peeled herself off the stained sheets and he watched her ass wobble into the kitchen.

Through the mirror, she poured herself a drink. The evening sun bloomed upon her naked body revealing all of its imperfections.

She was the most beautiful thing in his world.

-Pour me one.

Outside, it began to rain.

Short StoryLove
24

About the Creator

Dean F. Hardy

Writer from Dublin, Ireland.

*All work here is owned by Dean F. Hardy*

Reader insights

Outstanding

Excellent work. Looking forward to reading more!

Top insights

  1. Heartfelt and relatable

    The story invoked strong personal emotions

  2. Compelling and original writing

    Creative use of language & vocab

Add your insights

Comments (19)

Sign in to comment
  • Test10 months ago

    I loved this. Gritty and raw and perfectly poetic. Could almost be a scene from the movie, Once, had they ever sealed the damn deal. Beautiful stuff, Dean.

  • L.C. Schäfer10 months ago

    You know what they say... If you have to ask... 😜

  • Loryne Andawey10 months ago

    An intimate, but also realistic moment ❤. Beautifully done.

  • Iris Harris10 months ago

    Interesting. Nice symbolism with the rain. Beautiful.

  • Lamar Wiggins10 months ago

    Like other stories you have shared, this was cinematic, plucked right out of the movies and begs to be continued. Great Job, Dean.

  • Dana Stewart10 months ago

    This is so well done, definitely left me satisfied.

  • Brannan K.10 months ago

    Good job dean! A short, pleasant, relatable read. Been out of the loop for a few days, but I did get your notification!

  • Babs Iverson10 months ago

    Super spectacular!!!💖💖💕

  • Donna Renee10 months ago

    This is such a great microfiction moment, so short but tells a whole story and you get a bigger feel for their relationship. 👏

  • Very well written!!!

  • Dana Crandell10 months ago

    Wonderful imagery and tone.You tied the ending to the beginning nicely, too. This is a great challenge entry. (Sorry; had to repost the comment to eliminate my dyslexic typo.)

  • This is incredible. So well done

  • Gina C.10 months ago

    This is so raw yet beautiful. Such a real, human and earthly moment captured. Very well done!

  • Mariann Carroll10 months ago

    Nice

  • Stephanie Downard10 months ago

    You did an excellent job! The ending was perfect! Loved it!

  • Cathy holmes10 months ago

    That was really well done.

  • J. S. Wade10 months ago

    Whoa ! Sensuous. Honest. Real. Great story.

  • ARC10 months ago

    Damn sexy scene, Dean. Intimate and lasting as well. Love that I felt like this scene unfolded in sepia tones. No idea why, but it did. Strong work and excellent submission for the challenge.

  • This comment has been deleted

  • Heather Hubler10 months ago

    I've sat here after reading this multiple times and still cannot quite figure out how to say all the things this made me feel in so few words. I guess maybe that's all there is to say, you have a brilliant way with language and evoking emotion. This was fire!

Find us on social media

Miscellaneous links

  • Explore
  • Contact
  • Privacy Policy
  • Terms of Use
  • Support

© 2024 Creatd, Inc. All Rights Reserved.