The promise of rain trickled through the balcony door. It danced pleasantly between them. Pink and sweaty and naked.
-Did'ya get there?
-Duke, why d'ya always gotta do that huh?
-What, I'm curious..
-Askin' just ruins the fuckin' mood man!
She peeled herself off the stained sheets and he watched her ass wobble into the kitchen.
Through the mirror, she poured herself a drink. The evening sun bloomed upon her naked body revealing all of its imperfections.
She was the most beautiful thing in his world.
-Pour me one.
Outside, it began to rain.
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I loved this. Gritty and raw and perfectly poetic. Could almost be a scene from the movie, Once, had they ever sealed the damn deal. Beautiful stuff, Dean.
You know what they say... If you have to ask... 😜
An intimate, but also realistic moment ❤. Beautifully done.
Interesting. Nice symbolism with the rain. Beautiful.
Like other stories you have shared, this was cinematic, plucked right out of the movies and begs to be continued. Great Job, Dean.
This is so well done, definitely left me satisfied.
Good job dean! A short, pleasant, relatable read. Been out of the loop for a few days, but I did get your notification!
Super spectacular!!!💖💖💕
This is such a great microfiction moment, so short but tells a whole story and you get a bigger feel for their relationship. 👏
Very well written!!!
Wonderful imagery and tone.You tied the ending to the beginning nicely, too. This is a great challenge entry. (Sorry; had to repost the comment to eliminate my dyslexic typo.)
This is incredible. So well done
This is so raw yet beautiful. Such a real, human and earthly moment captured. Very well done!
Nice
You did an excellent job! The ending was perfect! Loved it!
That was really well done.
Whoa ! Sensuous. Honest. Real. Great story.
Damn sexy scene, Dean. Intimate and lasting as well. Love that I felt like this scene unfolded in sepia tones. No idea why, but it did. Strong work and excellent submission for the challenge.
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I've sat here after reading this multiple times and still cannot quite figure out how to say all the things this made me feel in so few words. I guess maybe that's all there is to say, you have a brilliant way with language and evoking emotion. This was fire!