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A Novice Gambit: a microfiction

A microfiction of magical hijinks and a small heist

By Ian ReadPublished 4 months ago Updated 4 months ago 1 min read
Top Story - June 2023
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A Novice Gambit: a microfiction
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"What if Magister Delbreck catches us, Donald? You know what he'll do!" one boy said, warily casting a spell of detection over a cabinet.

"Do you want to pass exams or not, Kellan?" retorted Donald, haphazardly rummaging through drawers and bookshelves.

Kellan nodded.

"Then quit being antsy! Just find the damn formula while they're none the wiser!"

"A magister's study must have a thousand wards..." Kellan said.

Delbreck's study was more a miniature library than anything else. There were dozens of places to hide things: full bookshelves, cabinets, a desk, suits of armor; too many places to search in the time they had. The boys also left the door to the college cloister open in case they needed a hasty escape.

Suddenly, Donald opened a drawer and held a paper aloft, "Huzzah!"

A book sailed through the air and struck him on the forehead.

"Run!" said Kellan.

Donald was already out of the room with the formula when two suits of armor came to life. The study door flew shut behind Donald. Panicked, Kellan drew sigils in the air and teleported outside.

There, he saw a magister holding Donald by the ear.

"Boys," Delbreck said admonishingly.

"Magister," they said fearfully.

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About the Creator

Ian Read

I am an archaeologist and amateur story-teller. On my profile, you'll be in for fantasy, science fiction, and the occasional thriller. History, horror, whimsy, and adventure lie in wait. Feel free to comment and interact.

From New Hampshire

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Nice work

Very well written. Keep up the good work!

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    Original narrative & well developed characters

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    Well-structured & engaging content

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    Zero grammar & spelling mistakes

  1. Compelling and original writing

    Creative use of language & vocab

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  • Holly Pheni3 months ago

    Oh, I like this! Magical fantasy heists are the best!

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  • Paul Stewart4 months ago

    Why am I not susbcribed to you already. Bad bad oversight on my part. This is a great take on the challenge and I'm already intrigued by the world you've built in such a short piece of writing!Congrats on Top Story!

  • Nobody4 months ago

    Great read

  • Aphotic4 months ago

    Ooh, I like this take on the challenge! Nice world building and characterization. I have a feeling this wasn’t Delbreck‘s first time dealing with these two…🤔

  • Melissa Ingoldsby4 months ago

    Very creative and I enjoyed your very magical spin on this challenge 🧐

  • Novel Allen4 months ago

    Too much Harry Potter and such eh! Love all the mystical magical stuff. Bravo on TS.

  • Dana Stewart4 months ago

    Nicely put together. Quite clever using some ‘magic’ on the micro fiction plot. Congratulations

  • Gerald Holmes4 months ago

    Excellent story-telling. Left me wanting to know what comes next. Congrats on the Top Story.

  • Lamar Wiggins4 months ago

    That was very entertaining. The set up and language was perfect! Congrats, Ian.

  • Ashley Lima4 months ago

    Fantastic, Ian! Well done, and many congratulations on your Top Story :)

  • D. D. Lee4 months ago

    The scene came to life perfectly as I read the story. It does make you wish there was more, curious to know what happens next.

  • Donna Renee4 months ago

    This is really cool, Ian! I want the long version too haha

  • C. H. Richard4 months ago

    Enjoyed that! Would be a great story to continue with as well as microfiction 😊 Congratulations on Top Story ! 👏

  • Matthew Fromm4 months ago

    Congrats on the top story sir!

  • This was great fun, really enjoyed it and congratulations on your top stiry

  • Cathy holmes4 months ago

    Nicely done. Congrats on the TS

  • Lilly Cooper4 months ago

    I like what you have done with such a limited word count :) and that the subject is magic is not where my mind was going when I read about the challenge. I like your take on it!

  • Cendrine Marrouat4 months ago

    Very well done! Not easy considering the word limitation.

  • Ash Digest4 months ago

    Reminds me of the games me and my siblings would play when we were kids, love how you drew us in with such a short, but well written (stuck on the correct term for this lol) and magical way, well done!

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