A Novice Gambit: a microfiction
A microfiction of magical hijinks and a small heist
"What if Magister Delbreck catches us, Donald? You know what he'll do!" one boy said, warily casting a spell of detection over a cabinet.
"Do you want to pass exams or not, Kellan?" retorted Donald, haphazardly rummaging through drawers and bookshelves.
Kellan nodded.
"Then quit being antsy! Just find the damn formula while they're none the wiser!"
"A magister's study must have a thousand wards..." Kellan said.
Delbreck's study was more a miniature library than anything else. There were dozens of places to hide things: full bookshelves, cabinets, a desk, suits of armor; too many places to search in the time they had. The boys also left the door to the college cloister open in case they needed a hasty escape.
Suddenly, Donald opened a drawer and held a paper aloft, "Huzzah!"
A book sailed through the air and struck him on the forehead.
"Run!" said Kellan.
Donald was already out of the room with the formula when two suits of armor came to life. The study door flew shut behind Donald. Panicked, Kellan drew sigils in the air and teleported outside.
There, he saw a magister holding Donald by the ear.
"Boys," Delbreck said admonishingly.
"Magister," they said fearfully.
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Nice work
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Excellent storytelling
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Zero grammar & spelling mistakes
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Comments (21)
These micro fictions are so hard for me but you made it look easy!
Oh, I like this! Magical fantasy heists are the best!
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Why am I not susbcribed to you already. Bad bad oversight on my part. This is a great take on the challenge and I'm already intrigued by the world you've built in such a short piece of writing!Congrats on Top Story!
Great read
Ooh, I like this take on the challenge! Nice world building and characterization. I have a feeling this wasn’t Delbreck‘s first time dealing with these two…🤔
Very creative and I enjoyed your very magical spin on this challenge 🧐
Obsessed!
Too much Harry Potter and such eh! Love all the mystical magical stuff. Bravo on TS.
Nicely put together. Quite clever using some ‘magic’ on the micro fiction plot. Congratulations
Excellent story-telling. Left me wanting to know what comes next. Congrats on the Top Story.
That was very entertaining. The set up and language was perfect! Congrats, Ian.
Fantastic, Ian! Well done, and many congratulations on your Top Story :)
The scene came to life perfectly as I read the story. It does make you wish there was more, curious to know what happens next.
This is really cool, Ian! I want the long version too haha
Enjoyed that! Would be a great story to continue with as well as microfiction 😊 Congratulations on Top Story ! 👏
Congrats on the top story sir!
This was great fun, really enjoyed it and congratulations on your top stiry
Nicely done. Congrats on the TS
I like what you have done with such a limited word count :) and that the subject is magic is not where my mind was going when I read about the challenge. I like your take on it!
Very well done! Not easy considering the word limitation.
Reminds me of the games me and my siblings would play when we were kids, love how you drew us in with such a short, but well written (stuck on the correct term for this lol) and magical way, well done!