Feedback Needed!!!!!

I need some help with my blurb! What do you guys think? I know it's kinda long, but I'm trying to give a broad overview of what my book is about. However, I'm willing to gut what seems unnecessary. The book is a blend of sci-fi and fantasy (more sci-fi). Those who love Zodiac Academy by Caroline Peckam will definitely enjoy this. (Okay, I'm a little biased.)

Please leave some feedback; even if you'd never read a book like this, I'm just looking for some constructive criticism.

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Lodestar Academy: Trials of Initiation

Defying gravity, guarding the galaxy. Earn your wings at the Lodestar Academy.

Nira, a member of a peaceful race, dreams of attending the prestigious Lodestar Academy on Metasphere; the Interplanetary Alliance’s world base of operations. But Nira's dreams clash with the expectations of her Order, who believes she's defying her nature by joining the brutal military school.

Upon her acceptance and with the support of her family, Nira's long-held dream of attending the elite military school is on the verge of becoming a reality. But as she embarks on her journey, she quickly realizes that this academy is nothing like she imagined.

As the Trials of Initiation loom, Nira is faced with seemingly insurmountable challenges and the weight of societal expectations. Her journey serves as an admirable testament to the resilience of pursuing one's dreams.

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