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The Smell of Rain

A thriller detective story

By FraydaPublished about a year ago 7 min read
The Smell of Rain
Photo by Константин Мартынов on Unsplash

Part 1: The Call

The rain started falling around 3:00 a.m. It wasn’t the quiet kind either. It came down hard and fast, smacking the windows of the tiny apartment like it had something to prove. Detective Jesse Hart was still awake, sitting on the edge of his bed with a cup of cold coffee and a cigarette he hadn’t bothered to light. His phone buzzed on the nightstand.

He stared at it for a second. He already knew what kind of call it was. Nothing good ever came at this hour.

“Yeah,” he said, answering it.

“Jesse. It’s Dana.” Sergeant Dana Ruiz sounded tired. Or pissed. Maybe both.

“What is it?” Jesse asked, rubbing the back of his neck.

“Dead body. Abandoned house off Miller Street. Looks like a mess.”

Jesse sighed. “You call me in because it’s bad or because you owe me a favor?”

“Both,” she said. “Get down here. You’ll want to see it.”

Click.

He didn’t waste time. Threw on jeans, a shirt, and his black coat that still smelled like last week’s Chinese food. It was the only one he had with deep enough pockets. He left the coffee on the nightstand, untouched. The rain hadn’t let up when he stepped outside. He pulled up the collar of his coat and ducked into his car.

The drive wasn’t long. Miller Street was one of those half-forgotten places in the city. Old, cracked sidewalks. Houses with boarded-up windows. The kind of street where nothing good ever happens and nobody really asks why.

He pulled up to the scene. The lights from two patrol cars flashed red and blue against the rain-soaked pavement. Dana stood under a broken streetlamp, arms crossed, rain bouncing off her jacket. She didn’t say anything until he got close.

“You look like hell,” she said.

“Feels worse,” he replied. “Where is it?”

She pointed toward the house. “Back bedroom. Don’t slip.”

The house was dark, smelled like mold and rot. The front door barely hung on its hinges. Jesse stepped inside carefully, boots leaving wet prints on the stained wood floor. The wallpaper was peeling. Everything creaked.

The bedroom was lit with one overhead bulb, swinging slightly from the ceiling. There was blood. A lot of it. Splattered across the walls and soaked into the old carpet like someone had spilled a gallon of red paint. In the middle of it all was the body — male, maybe late twenties, hands tied behind his back, mouth taped shut, throat cut deep.

Jesse crouched beside the body. His eyes scanned the scene.

“Ritualistic?” he asked Dana, who’d followed him in.

“Not sure. No signs of forced entry. No defensive wounds. Almost like he let the killer walk right in.”

“Who found him?”

“Anonymous tip. Call came from a payphone about ten blocks from here. No cameras. No name.”

Jesse nodded slowly. “Someone wanted us to see this.”

“Looks that way.”

He stood up and looked around the room. There were little things that stood out — a small gold chain near the body, broken; a cracked photo frame on the dresser, face down; a shoeprint in the blood, too small to be the victim’s.

“You run prints yet?” he asked.

“Already started. No ID on the body. No wallet, no phone. He’s a ghost.”

“Not anymore,” Jesse muttered.

Outside, the rain had eased to a drizzle. Jesse lit the cigarette he’d skipped earlier and leaned against his car. Dana came out a few minutes later, lighting one of her own.

“You think this is the start of something?” she asked.

Jesse didn’t answer right away. He took a drag and looked down the empty street, the houses with no lights, the windows like blank eyes watching everything.

“Yeah,” he said finally. “Feels like it.”Part 2: The Clue Nobody Noticed

Back at the station, Jesse leaned over the evidence table, staring at the chain they found near the body. It was cheap — gold-plated, not real. But the charm on it was something else: a tiny key, no longer than a thumb, etched with a strange symbol. Almost like an “S” inside a circle.

He tapped it with a pen, thinking.

“What do you think it opens?” Dana asked, arms folded across her chest.

“No idea,” Jesse said. “But it wasn’t just jewelry. Someone wanted us to find this.”

“Could be a message?”

“Or a warning.”

Dana frowned. “The bloodwork’s back. Victim’s name was Joel Porter. No priors. Lived in a studio downtown. Freelance graphic designer. Nothing weird there.”

Jesse raised an eyebrow. “People don’t end up with their throats slit in abandoned houses unless there’s something weird going on.”

“Fair,” Dana said. “Want to check out his apartment?”

Jesse grabbed his coat. “Let’s go.”

Joel’s apartment was on the third floor of a building that smelled like old socks and pizza grease. Dana buzzed the super, who let them in with a grunt and didn’t ask questions.

The place was neat — too neat. Like a hotel room after checkout. No dirty dishes. No laundry. The laptop on the desk had been wiped clean.

“Someone cleaned house,” Jesse muttered, opening drawers. All empty.

Dana pulled a notebook from under the couch cushion. “What’s this?”

Jesse flipped it open. Just doodles at first — graphic design sketches, logos, color schemes. But then near the back were strange symbols again. Like the one on the key.

And a name: “Orion Club”. Written three times. Underlined.

Jesse’s eyes narrowed. “Orion Club. That ring any bells?”

Dana shook her head. “Not to me. Sounds fancy.”

“Or dangerous,” Jesse said.

Part 3: Orion

It took a few calls, but by sunset, they had a location.

The Orion Club wasn’t a nightclub. It was a private “discussion group” that met once a week in the back room of an old bookstore downtown. Sounded innocent, but Jesse had been in this game long enough to know better.

He and Dana pulled up to the bookstore just after dark. The windows were fogged from inside. Light glowed between the cracks in the blinds.

“Wanna go in loud or quiet?” Dana asked.

Jesse smiled slightly. “Let’s be polite. For now.”

They stepped in. The smell of old paper hit them immediately — the kind of musty, comforting scent only old bookstores have. A skinny man in a turtleneck looked up from behind the counter.

“We’re closed,” he said, adjusting his glasses.

“We’re not here for books,” Jesse replied, flashing his badge.

The man froze. Then his eyes shifted toward the back room.

“We just talk philosophy,” he muttered.

“Sure,” Jesse said. “I like philosophy. Especially when people end up dead afterward.”

The back room door creaked as Jesse pushed it open.

Inside were six people, sitting in a circle. Middle-aged, all of them. One man stood up quickly.

“Can we help you?”

Jesse stepped inside, eyes sweeping the room. On the wall was a framed print of the Orion constellation. Beneath it — a small locked cabinet.

He held up the charm key. “This yours?”

Silence.

One woman’s face went pale.

Jesse saw it. “What’s behind the cabinet?”

Nobody answered.

He stepped forward and used the key. It clicked.

Inside were files. Photos. Names. Maps. Surveillance shots.

Dana’s voice was sharp. “What the hell is this?”

“People,” Jesse muttered. “They’re watching people.”

One folder said “Joel Porter.”

And beneath it — another: “Detective Jesse Hart.”

Part 4: The Shadows Behind the Name

Back in the car, Jesse stared at the file with his name on it.

There were photos of him getting coffee. Walking his dog. At the cemetery visiting his dad’s grave.

“I didn’t think I was that interesting,” he said softly.

Dana looked over, concern in her eyes. “You think they’re targeting cops?”

“Not all cops,” Jesse said. “Just me.”

They took the files back to the station. Turned out the Orion Club wasn’t really a club — it was a front. Behind it was a group of powerful men and women who believed the world needed “cleansing.” People who didn’t fit their mold — outsiders, dreamers, misfits — were threats to be erased.

Joel had found out. Maybe by accident. Maybe he was trying to warn someone. Either way, he ended up dead.

Jesse’s name in the file meant one thing: they knew he was close. And they weren’t done.

Part 5: The Trap

Two days later, Jesse’s apartment got broken into. Nothing stolen. Just his files flipped, clothes slashed, photos burned. A message.

“Back off.”

He didn’t.

Instead, he and Dana set a trap.

They sent a message — false info that they’d found a witness, and the witness would meet them at the train station. Jesse waited there for hours.

At midnight, a man approached him. Dressed clean, expensive shoes, a cold smile.

“You shouldn’t have gotten involved,” the man said.

“I’m a detective,” Jesse replied. “It’s kind of my job.”

The man reached into his coat.

Jesse was faster.

One shot. Chest. The man dropped, clutching the hole where his heart used to be.

When they checked his wallet, it had the same symbol — the circle with the “S.” Orion wasn’t just a group. It was a network.

And they weren’t all gone.

Part 6: The Rain Again

Weeks passed. Arrests were made. Files exposed. The Orion Club dissolved — at least on paper.

Jesse sat at his desk one night, rain tapping the window again. It sounded the same as before, but something in him had changed.

He wasn’t sure if the danger was really over. He doubted it ever would be. But at least now, he knew the faces behind the shadows.

And maybe, just maybe, the next person like Joel would live long enough to tell their story.

[THE END]

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    Written by Frayda