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Twisted Tale: Hansel & Gretel

L.C. Schäfer's Fucked Up Fairytales Challenge

By Dharrsheena Raja SegarranPublished about a month ago 2 min read
Top Story - April 2024
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“Go! Go into the woods and never come back! The Queen would have you killed by someone else, even if I don’t do it!”

The Huntsman’s words kept ringing in Snow White’s ears as she ran haphazardly through the woods.

Where would she go? Where would she hide? How would she survive?

All those thoughts ceased when she spotted a cottage. Relief washed over her.

There was something very peculiar about this cottage, though. It was very colourful. As she got closer, she gasped. The cottage was made out of cakes and chocolates!

She wanted to break off a piece of the window pane to see if the chocolate was real but decided against it.

Instead, she knocked on the door. “Hello, is anyone home? I was wondering, are these real? Would it be okay for me to eat some?”

The door slowly swung open to reveal a girl around the age of twelve. “Would you like to eat with us?”

“Oh, that sounds absolutely delightful! I hope I’m not imposing. My name is Snow White. What’s yours?”

“I’m Gretel and –”, she opened the door wider to reveal a boy, “– that’s my brother, Hansel. Only both of us live here.”

“Oh my, you poor little things! Would it be okay if I stayed here and took care of you both? I can clean, I can cook –”

Hansel interrupted her, “You don’t have to cook.” He pointed at the kitchen door. “You can go anywhere in this cottage except the kitchen. If you agree to that, you can stay with us.”

Snow White found that weird but agreed as she was grateful to have a place to stay.

~~~~~

That night, Snow White heard noises from the kitchen. She thought there were intruders, so she went to check. She tried to open the kitchen door but it was locked.

So she peeped through the keyhole and what she saw scarred her for life.

Hansel pushed Gretel head first into the oven and lifted up her skirt. He then proceeded to pound her hard from the back.

Snow White was horrified but still watched until both Hansel and Gretel reached a Happy Ending.

The End.
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Author's Notes:

This story (366 words) was written for
L.C. Schäfer's Fucked Up Fairytales Challenge. It takes place after Gretel pushed the witch into the oven and killed her but instead of returning to their cottage after that, Hansel and Gretel stayed in the witch's cottage. Snow White found this cottage instead of the Seven Dwarf's cottage.

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Dharrsheena Raja Segarran

My mental health decline brought about a lot of darkness and I embraced it. It now flows out mostly as Dark Stories and Poetry.

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  • Belle12 days ago

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  • Isabella Rose16 days ago

    I never expected that ending. Your writing never fails to impress me, My Morbid Friend.

  • V Devi17 days ago

    Your writing is amazing!! 😍

  • Sasi Kala18 days ago

    congrats...! Top Story!

  • Congratulations on Top Story!

  • Tamseel Hussain22 days ago

    Amazing story dear.

  • Belle23 days ago

    Congrats on top story!!

  • Abdul Qayyum23 days ago

    nice writing

  • Ainy Abraham24 days ago

    You mixed two tales excellently. I often think about such old stories and want to modify them. Thanks for this opening.

  • is there a way to message privately on here? If not would you be willing to email or text through social media? I have a few question and you seem to fit the best writer for it.

  • Mika Oka26 days ago

    Love the twist on this

  • mahmoud elsaad27 days ago

    So beautifully written! Loved it.

  • shrey 28 days ago

    excellent story. congratulations on top story.

  • Anna 29 days ago

    Congrats on Top Story!🥳🥳🥳

  • Gina C.about a month ago

    Girl, I had to read that ending about 5 times to make sure what I THOUGHT was happening....was really happening 🤣🤣 I'm like WHY IS MY MIND SO DIRTY!??! lmao! This was honestly genius - very entertaining and definitely unexpected 🤗❤️🫣

  • Ali SPabout a month ago

    Wow… what a way to go! Interesting read. Congrats on top story!

  • Azam Javedabout a month ago

    Excellent story

  • Moshoodabout a month ago

    What a lovely story

  • ROCK about a month ago

    Congratulations on Top story Dharr! You sweet little weirdo, lol!

  • Suze Kayabout a month ago

    Lol... YUP that's fucked up!

  • olayinka peterabout a month ago

    Nice story 🥰

  • Susan Fourtanéabout a month ago

    What a twist! :D Congratulations on the Top Story!

  • The Invisible Writerabout a month ago

    Omgosh did not see the ending coming. Thanks for the great story to begin my day Dharr!

  • Kodahabout a month ago

    Back to say congrats on top storyy!!!! 💝🙌 🙌 🙌 🙌 🙌🥳🥳🥳🥳

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