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The Munchkin

"The Vocal + Assist Lost in a Story Challenge"

By Mother CombsPublished 2 months ago 1 min read
Top Story - September 2023
Image by Jerico Placido from Pixabay

This story is part of the Vocal + Assist on Facebook Lost in a Story Challenge. You can learn more about it here:

The house came out of nowhere. It dropped right out of the sky and landed on the Wicked Witch in the East, killing her instantly.

What kind of magic this was, we didn’t know. We were all scared to come out and question the beautiful witch who stepped out of her house with a furry creature in her arms.

Our mayor was too scared to do anything at all, which was usual for him. So it was left to me, his assistant, to do what needed doing. I sent a bubble to the Good Witch of the North to come and question the newcomer. Glinda came immediately.

Our good Witch questioned this new witch, who claimed she wasn’t a witch but a girl from Kansas. The girl said her name was Dorothy, and her creature’s name was Dog Toto.

After Glinda discerned that the girl meant no harm to us, she called us to Thank the girl for killing the Wicked Witch of the East. Our mayor gave the girl Dorothy the key to our town, which I thought was premature. The Lollipop Guild awarded her a lollipop. And the children gave her flowers and cookies from their mamas. I wanted this giant girl out of our town before she broke anything else.

Finally, I was summoned to show her how to get to Oz to see the Wizard. I, of course, directed her to the Yellow Brick Road because everyone knows that the Red Brick Road leads to the Quadling Country. We all ran beside her to the edge of the village, glad that she had saved us but ecstatic that she was leaving.

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About the Creator

Mother Combs

Come near, sit a spell, and listen to tales of old as I sit and rock by my fire. I'll serve you some cocoa and cookies as I tell you of the time long gone by when your Greats-greats once lived.

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    Well-structured & engaging content

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  • Andrea Corwin 2 months ago

    I liked it and also wished it was longer! Thanks for sharing.

  • L.C. Schäfer2 months ago

    I relate; she was definitely trouble!

  • Yep. First she falls into the pigpen, then she falls from the sky. That girl's not very coordinated no matter how much she skips & dances through her time here. Who knows what she'll break next? She might even knock a scarecrow from his post, pick apples from a grumpy tree, make a tinman start to cry, swat a lion on the nose without thinking, fall asleep in a field of poppies, &/or throw some water on someone!

  • Sian N. Clutton2 months ago

    I wish there was more! Good job!

  • Babs Iverson2 months ago

    Super, superb, lost in a story!!! Love this!!!❤️❤️💕

  • River Joy2 months ago

    Very nice! :)

  • Grz Colm2 months ago

    Lol! “Awarded a lollipop!” 😆 Great job Mother Combs.

  • Congratulations on the Top Story! We did Oz as well, but we took a different approach. Nice to see you know your Oz lore, bringing up Quadlings. 💙Anneliese

  • D. A. Ratliff2 months ago

    This was wonderful! I love the perspective and the originality! Great writing!

  • Melissa Ingoldsby2 months ago

    Very good twist! Good to see this from a citizen’s perspective instead of the big cats! Congratulations on top story

  • Lol, I loved the way you twisted this story! Congratulations on your Top Story!

  • Rachel Deeming2 months ago

    Excellent spin! Loved this new perspective. Munchkins seem a little wary.

  • Astonishing Concepts and Wording. Congratulations on your Top Story🎉

  • I love it. You took a familiar story and twisted it around enough so that it is an original. Great job Sharon!!! Congratulations on your Top Story!!!

  • Hannah Moore2 months ago

    "which I thought was premature" Bwahaha! Loved the last line, too. Makes the whole scene look different.

  • JBaz2 months ago

    ' because everyone knows that the Red Brick Road leads to the Quadling Country.' Love this line. I laughed. Congratulations on the challenge and great take

  • Cathy holmes2 months ago

    great job. Congrats on the TS.

  • Paul Stewart2 months ago

    yay! well done on Top Story!

  • Alex H Mittelman 2 months ago

    Fantastic! Great work!

  • Celia in Underland2 months ago

    Loved this take! I can really imagine the Lollipop Guild! And smug Dorothy taking it happily with townsfolk surrounding her irritaed as hell! 🤍

  • This was awesome. Great job!!

  • Kendall Defoe 2 months ago

    Oh, I loved this! Thank you for this one!

  • Paul Stewart2 months ago

    Love it! Nice work, Sharon! :)

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