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The Collector

A simple heist until it isn’t

By C.Z.Published 8 months ago 1 min read
Top Story - June 2023
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The Collector
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Simple.

I was expecting simple. The old man alone in his country home filled with a stunning art collection.

One old man, one job.

Sure, he had security but it was easy, cameras, dogs, window sensors. It was our fourth job together but we worked so smoothly, nothing could go wrong.

The Rottweilers were sedated, drooling all over a rug that cost several thousand dollars. The old man was at dinner, as he was every Friday night.

“What did you say this guy collects?” Ravi asked as we stared at the massive safe door.

“Just art. There’s a million articles about him, that’s how I heard about him.”

“There’s gotta be a big room back there,” Monica added. “Ravi can you handle the door?”

Ravi shot her an unimpressed look and got to work. Eventually the latch clicked and gave way.

“Guys,” Ravi’s voice trembled. “He’s not an art collector.”

We cautiously stepped into the gigantic room to behold a wall of skulls, perfectly in tact and grinning at us.

“Ew,” Monica gasped.

We heard a slight chuckle as we turned just in time to see the Old Man closing the door to the safe, adding us to his collection.

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C.Z.

A slightly inspired, barely motivated, lover of fact and fiction

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  • The Invisible Writer8 months ago

    Oh no 😱they walked right into the trap!

  • Gina C.8 months ago

    This is a very intriguing story! Enjoyed the twist very much :) Congrats on Top Story!!

  • I guess to some skulls are art work. Good job and well written. I subscribed, hearted, and left insights.

  • Andrei Z.8 months ago

    Haha, 'There’s a million articles about him' - looks like somebody doesn't like to read the articles carefully enough to know what/who they are really about😅 Congratulations on your top story!

  • Shane Dobbie8 months ago

    Nice work.

  • Cendrine Marrouat8 months ago

    That was quite the twist! I like how you set up the scene with very few words. Proof once again that dialogues can really move a story forward. Very well done! Congratulations on the Top Story!

  • sleepy drafts8 months ago

    Ouuuu, what a twist!! 👏🏻 Wonderfully done! 💗

  • MT Poetry8 months ago

    Congrats on Top Story!! This piece is both entertaining and unexpected, leaving me eager to see what comes next. Keep up the amazing work!!! 👏😊

  • Mackenzie Davis8 months ago

    Oh sooo creepy! I love it! 🤩 Congratulations on Top Story, too! Well deserved. This was incredibly entertaining. 😆

  • Tiffany Gordon 8 months ago

    WOW! 😱Phenomenal work! Congratulations on your Top Story!

  • Holly Pheni8 months ago

    Whoa! His version of "art" isn't the usual. Creepy and well-told!

  • Kelley Stead8 months ago

    Ah-mazing. A wonderful twist. Love that you fit all this in 200 words. Impressive

  • Paul Stewart8 months ago

    Instant subscriber after such a great little story. I enjoyed the twist, and although you had built the tension sufficiently, the payoff was unexpected! Congrats on Top Story!

  • Meagan Dion8 months ago

    That was awesome!!!

  • Dana Crandell8 months ago

    A great twist! Well done, and Congratulations on Top Story!

  • Lamar Wiggins8 months ago

    Great job! A reverse heist. The lure was a great trap. And congrats a top story.

  • Kim Loostrom8 months ago

    Love this! The suspense and the twist are fantastic!

  • Good one. Congratulations on your top story.

  • Dana Stewart8 months ago

    Fantastic twist! Congrats on the Top Story

  • Cathy holmes8 months ago

    Oh, this is great. Congrats on the TS

  • Denise Larkin8 months ago

    Loved that ending. The old man really did get them! Brilliant short fiction.

  • Wow 😯 would like to see where this goes 👀‼️

  • Lol, that was so unexpected and creepy! Awesome story!

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