On The Bus
Don't Fall Asleep
He was tired, he had left work late and it was grey and drizzling and going dark as he waited for the bus. He checked his phone, it was fully charged, and his team were playing away tonight but he would watch the match on the Sports Channel when he got home.
Maybe he would get a takeaway, he was far too tired to cook anything, even with one of those meal packs that he was on a three-month free trial for.
He had no umbrella so was getting wet but the bus turned up ten minutes late. The bus route had been diverted to go past the development for a new super high rise tower which he wasn't too sure about, but it would come to dominate the city but at the moment there was just a huge hole being filled with concrete and steel.
He went and sat at the back, he was the only one on the bus and tried to see where he was, but the drizzle and dirty windows just meant he could not see a thing and eventually he felt sleep catching up on him. If he did fall asleep he knew the driver would wake him because the bus terminated and then turned to return to town, but they always made sure the bus was empty before the return journey.
Sleep hit him and he was dreaming, in his dream, he thought he heard a bang but drifty off into oblivion.
Something woke him, he wasn't sure what, but suddenly he was wide awake but there was silence. The bus was not moving he must be at the end of the route so he got up, and walked to the front but there was no driver. The lights were still on but the door was shut.
He looked for the door release but could not see where it was but he looked at the door and it looked odd, in fact, all the windows looked odd, dirty, yes but grey and almost as though there was something against them. He rapped against a window and it seemed solid, this was not a glass sound this was the sound of hitting a brick wall.
Then there was a noise, he wasn’t sure what it was but it scared him. It was like a window cracking, like the bit on the vehicle in Jurassic Park when it hanging over the cliff, that's what the noise was like. He felt cold and scared.
He remembered his phone, he got it out, almost fully charged but no signal. It was connected to the bus wifi but there was no internet access and no phone signal at all. He dialled 999 but that couldn’t get a signal either.
The cracking was getting worse and all of a sudden every window exploded inwards with a tide of grey stone or concrete, he lasted a few seconds before he was crushed and drowned.
LOCAL NEWS FLASH:
A bus skidded off the road tonight and sank in the setting concrete of the new prestigious tower block foundations, The driver jumped clear and slammed his door hoping it would stay on the surface but the concrete will take a long time to set. The driver said the bus was empty so there was no need to try any rescue attempt. He was breathalysed but this was just an unfortunate road accident.
The driver is convalescing after his traumatic experience.
It has been decided that the bus will remain as part of the foundations.
NOTE:
I am not sure if any of this is technically correct but I have made assumptions to ensure the flow of the story.
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Comments (4)
That's it. I'm never getting on the bus again.
This story was a little different for you. I like the idea and premise. It was easy to read. Good job on this one Mike!
I just recently watched a movie where a bus with 10 people in it would get trapped under a landslide. It was a fantastic movie. And your story reminded me of that. The scariest part was the driver in your story said there's no need for rescue. Excellent horror story!
Good job!💕