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HUMAN

"In space, everybody can hear you scream."

By Miles PenPublished 2 years ago Updated 2 years ago 6 min read
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HUMAN
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Nobody can hear a scream in the vacuum of space, or so they say.”

The creature was the last of its kind and it whispered those solemn words into the infinite night. Waking from a thousand year sleep that should've been its permanent death.

Or so they say…. Or so they say,” the creature repeated. Shivering erratically from the final phase of its cryo-reanimation.

Uttering a dead language that nobody else on the spacecraft could possibly understand.

Emerging from a millennial coma that seemed as long and empty as space itself.

The Vazré had travelled through several different solar systems and this new life-form, whom they had cryogenically resurrected, was unlike any they had ever encountered.

They had captured small neon organisms floating en masse upon the low-gravity moons of a planet whose name was unpronounceable. They had narrowly escaped a hive of monstrous parasites whose body fluid was highly corrosive. They had found broken and glyph-tattooed machines on a dead desert orb; but even these did not reveal much (other than that their extinct makers were fairly sophisticated yet still intellectually primitive.)

And that was it. Out of 27 different solar systems and 317 different planets. That was all this galaxy had to offer.

Nobody can hear… Nobody can hear...”

But this creature was different. It appeared to be extremely sentient, even capable of symbolic communication. If only they could understand it.

They had already spent much time attempting to reactivate the frozen capsule in which it was discovered (floating in space), but other than the occasional electronic hiss from radiation-damaged equipment, there was no progress. No trace to the phantom in their midst.

The creature was kept in a clean airtight examination room where medical bots continually scanned it for dangerous microbes and viruses.

But so far, it was clean. Coming in and out of consciousness. Exhaling and inhaling in a soft steady rhythm. Speaking in strange words that were totally alien to every crew member onboard.

The Vazré watched it from the many screens of the spacecraft’s control room. They had grown attached to it. It had childlike features and two large eyes that wordlessly expressed both fear and wonder. Here was something very precious and rare… a life-form of higher intelligence that must’ve evolved as they had once evolved, or else how could it be anything like them?

Sure, its capsule was barbaric and primitive compared to the technology they wielded, but this is also what made the creature so lovable. It was like the infant who attempts to mimic the expressions of the adults around it. Nice try.

Surely such an organism would be empathetic once it regained full consciousness. Surely it came from a species of moral animals who were not only intelligent but also highly adaptive — and being so adaptive meant one thing — this creature desperately needed others in order to survive and thrive. It had to be social and sensitive and must've based its life around acquiring the attention of others. The constant stimulation of endorphins and mirror neurons.

The Vazré had evolved from something similar; fragile creatures who needed love just as much as they needed food and water. Most of their communication was via telepathic vibrations, what they called connecting, and through this they created a civilization advanced enough to transcend all social divisions and prejudices. Politics was completely outlawed. To hold the highest power amongst them was to hold the deepest connections with others. Theirs was a system both simple and genuine, and it worked.

By such connecting they attained an energy source that allowed them the means for interstellar transportation.

And here they were, on the edge of a solar system containing only 8 planets, and with their single greatest discovery almost fully recovered.

Nobody can hear a scream...”

Whispering this the childlike animal opened its eyes like never before and realized that it was alone; yet not alone. It began to scream. Ripping off the sustenance tubes attached to its body. Violently knocking over the bots that monitored the exam room.

“Where am I! WHERE THE HELL AM I?” It continued to shout at the four metal walls.

The Vazré didn’t like to see any living thing in such a frantic state. With a button’s press a mild tranquilizing gas wafted into the exam room and the life-form was sedated without losing consciousness. It cracked a weak smile and the euphoric fumes were stopped.

They all thought on what to do next. It was obviously frightened because it didn’t know where it was or who it was surrounded by.

They agreed to make first contact. Having resisted such prior action because they weren’t sure if the specimen was clean, nor was it even in a mental state that could recognize them.

They knew that by simply tapping the creature on the head, while it was partially conscious, they could connect with it — they could read its memories and thoughts and origins. All of these connections would instantly and telepathically replay in the control room as the rest of the crew watched and evaluated the ongoing situation.

Two of them entered the exam room and found it sitting on the floor with its back propped against the cryo-bed. It stared at them with wide eyes. Trembling with disbelief if not outright shock.

“What — what are you,” it gasped.

The Vazré made the universal hand gesture for hello, but they had four arms a piece so several open palms were raised into the air all at once.

The creature began to scream again, but this soon abated as it entered a catatonic state. The freeze mode of all frightened lower vertebrates.

The Vazré closest to the creature extended an arm and gently touched its sweat-laced forehead. That’s all it took. In cerebral waves that rolled faster than lightning everything about this life-form was instantly revealed.

The screens in the control room came alive with different mind-connected images. The creature was an adult male from a planet called Earth.

The connecting showed exactly what such "intelligent" animals had done to themselves and to their home planet:

Pollution.

Climate crisis.

Ecological collapse.

Nuclear war.

Genocide.

Mass extinction.

A visual symphony of terror and tragedy flashed before the Vazré's eyes.

Crimes unspeakable in any language and amongst any species.

The dying screams of an entire world could be heard in one singular moment.

It was shown that the wealthiest among their kind had managed to escape such world-ending disasters by constructing space vessels that contained “life boat” capsules. But, those who had been responsible for much of their planet’s ruin were also the only ones who could afford to leave it behind.

The Vazré finally knew what they were dealing with here — this was the most lethal organism in the universe — it was a human.

Oh no.

Alarms went off and the two crew members turned to exit the exam room. One of them caught a glimpse of a broken medical bot on the floor — its syringe needle and scalpel blades were missing — a deep pain rippled across this Vazré’s neck and a primal cry echoed throughout the spacecraft.

A scream so loud and vast that perhaps it pierced the vacuum of space itself… “Or so they say.”

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Miles Pen

I'm a Native American artist and storyteller who enjoys creating new things.

* Nitsiniiyi'taki ("I Thank You" in Blackfeet)

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  • Amber Forest8 months ago

    Wow, this was very gripping. Nice work 🙂

  • The Narrator 2 years ago

    Myles, this was such a great read. I loved the idea and twist of the “human meets alien” trope. You made it so original! Thank you for reading mine and having me read yours. Twas an honor! Can’t wait to read more!

  • Ashley McGee2 years ago

    Thanks for reading my story! I am only too happy to read yours. It was great! I think it aptly captures a strongly held belief we have that aliens haven't come into contact with us as a whole because we're just awful. We're awful to each other; we're awful to the planet. We are the villains in our own story. Thanks for sharing this one!

  • Craig Rose2 years ago

    Myles that was great man!

  • Skip Maloney2 years ago

    Couldn't find a link to answer your latest question to me about your story. No "reply" button right after your question and no in-house way to send messages directly to a fellow Vocal member, or at least none that I could find. That's a shame. I was hoping that we could find some other way (location) to continue the discussion. Not that my words aren't riveting enough to entertain the legions of folk who browse through the comments below your story, but I suspect that the private conversation between you and I isn't relevant to most of them. Thus, the search for an alternative. Looked for you on FB and couldn't find you and I'm not sure that passing along an alternate means of communication with specific addresses would be helpful. Do you use FB? If you do, I am readily discoverable out there as my name here on Vocal. A friend request would afford us an opportunity to speak privately via Messenger. Nothing top-secret or volatile about my answer to your questions, just a belief that it's something of a private conversation best conducted in a private place.

  • Kat Thorne2 years ago

    Great plot! I loved how creepy feeling your writing style was in the beginning.

  • Heather Hubler2 years ago

    Well done! I really enjoyed your story. I like that you switched things up and had the POV from the 'alien' perspective and didn't overwhelm the reader with too many unfamiliar terms. Loved the cliffhanger ending, great hook!

  • Jay2 years ago

    Wow! This is a great first chapter to wonderful story that I would be interested in reading if you continued! Keep up the great work. Stay awesome :)

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  • Skip Maloney2 years ago

    It is, indeed, a compelling start to a 'first contact' encounter, told from the viewpoint of a galactic race encountering Earth-origin life forms. My primary concern, in regard to its opening chapter, is that we learn too much. We learn of the Vazre's research, examples of previous findings, and the exact number of solar systems and planets it had encountered before running into this inexplicable 'being' from who knows where. We then discover, in some kind of mind-meld, details about the creature's cultural history, that includes a laundry list of mankind's most egregious errors and learn that the creature is "human," (in bold lettering) and an italic "Oh, no." I believe that you could delay the 'reveal' of the creature's humanity beyond the opening. Perhaps lay out the 'first contact' procedures, with focus on the puzzle that the creature's very existence poses to the Vazre. At that juncture, you will have set up an immediate problem; the Vazre asking themselves "How do we communicate with this thing?" I contend that information about the creature's personal and to a greater extent, its species' history could be delayed to the benefit of the developing tale. It 'feels' as though you've written something of a personal (to you) outline of where you were going with the story, to include all of the background material and threw all of the ideological underpinnings of your outline and ideas into the opening chapter. I think we could wait. I think the surprise 'twist' that the creature is human would benefit from an ongoing narrative about the Vazre's attempts and practices regarding 'first contact,' long before they attempted the 'mind meld' thing and I honestly don't think that the laundry list of humanity's mistakes are an effective way to offer that information to readers. Better that we intuit this stuff, rather than be hit over the head with it. Perhaps, eventually, in some form of a conversation, representatives of the Vazre might inquire of this human why his species and the planet it inhabits have had such a history of bad decisions and disastrous consequences. Among the many reasons that I don't often offer commentary on the work of others, is my concern that rightfully so, an author who's put his/her time into preparing a tale might justifiably question what manner of credentials I bring to a commentary table that would validate whatever opinion I articulate. Hard to answer, really. Certainly doesn't stem from any impressive list of publishing credentials or my own relative success as a writer. I think, more than anything, what 'street cred' I bring to evaluation is in the area of reading, which I do a LOT. As I recently explained to a somewhat stunned teenager who, for the life of him, can't imagine why anyone would read a book, I have been reading one book or another, one right after another since I was about 12; so make that 60 years. In that time, I have developed a strong sense of what makes the 'reading' experience work for me. And others, of different habits, tastes and patience. I know when an author is trying to make a point, rather than having one of his/her characters make a point, prompted by activities and circumstances related to the story he/she's trying to tell. You were kind enough to read and comment on my story, and though I hesitated, concerned about my concerns with your tale as it emerged, I finally decided that the proper response would be an honest answer, culminating in an honest 'thumbs up' to the style, substance and direction of the piece, while providing you with a carefully considered appraisal of the opening chapter. Good luck and keep writing.

  • Barden Revelle 2 years ago

    Well done! Nice twist! I love how you slowly introduced that the prospective was that of distant origin aliens encountering humans and Earth for the first time. I like the part about "the connecting". Great minds think alike!

  • Dana Stewart2 years ago

    Great story, very imaginative to be told from the Vazré POV! I’d certainly like to read more! Well done!

  • I really enjoyed it. This is the first chapter to a very strong storyline for a sci-fi book. I also really liked the mirror interpretation of humans and the Vazre. It was very cool reading this from the Vazre prospective.

  • Jim Devin2 years ago

    This is such a good first chapter to a sci-fi story. I wanna read more!

  • Made in DNA2 years ago

    Nice. Get on a novel right away. Subscribed. Looking forward to more!

  • RJ Lyons2 years ago

    Your story was super captivating. Is it a short, or is there going to be more chapters? I would love to read more if it is a story.

  • KJ Aartila2 years ago

    Interesting & creative twist. Nice work.

  • Becca2 years ago

    This is one of best short stories I've read in a while. Good work

  • R. M. Staniforth2 years ago

    Great story my friend, it painted a beautiful picture of the vast universe.

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  • G.B. Veen2 years ago

    Wowww, this is a great story of other sentient beings probing humans. Didn't expect human to the cutie pie here . Nice one ☺️ n good luck !

  • Zack Duncan2 years ago

    Super interested to see where this could go. It’s like Alien but where the humans are the monsters! Nice twist

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