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Written for the Heather Hubler 'Unscramble challenge'

By Lamar WigginsPublished about a month ago Updated about a month ago 1 min read
Top Story - April 2024
45
Dall E

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I shattered a window today. I'm not sure if they noticed or even care. My reasons remain cloaked, forever enlaced in a boundless mind.

Time has congealed. Thickened and caked like day old tomato soup left on the kitchen ledge...

I once thought of myself as a cloned hero; a person who could be relied upon to save the day. But I've become leaden, downright wacked in the skull, wedged between here and there.

I remember the glow, the dance of happiness locked in motion, wintering in a decadelong glance.

They know I'm here, but only coddle their own feelings. I used to be like them, living out dreams and sharing love, until my body left me for reasons I can’t recall. Only the repetitive memory of a gun and a struggle with a woman I don’t know, remains. I’m left with my wakened spirit to linger between these walls. No angel or light to lead me away, no one to acknowledge me...

Dall E

PsychologicalMicrofiction
45

About the Creator

Lamar Wiggins

Creative writer in the Northeast US who loves the paranormal, mystery, true crime, horror, humor, fantasy and poetry. Take a chance, you'll be thoroughly entertained.

"Life is Love Experienced" -LW

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  • L.C. Schäfer24 days ago

    Utterly unsurprised this won!!

  • Christy Munson26 days ago

    Congratulations!

  • Paul Stewart27 days ago

    Back to say congrats on winning the microfiction 1st place for theHH's challenge, buddy. This was just incredible!

  • Well deserved win in Heather's challenge.✅

  • Cathy holmes27 days ago

    Congrats again!

  • Sandra Matos27 days ago

    Congratulations on winning Heather's challenge! It is clear why you won. You were able to take us on a journey with a limited amount of words. You were able to surprise us and make us feel by using words made out of letters in another word, which is not easy to do. I found it difficult to not sound choppy, yet your story flowed so easily. Excellent!

  • Anna 29 days ago

    Congrats on Top Story!🥳🥳🥳

  • Heather Hubler29 days ago

    Just wow, Lamar!! I'm so happy this received TS because it was too good not to get more exposure. You really came to win with this one. The picture and the mood you set and then the revelation at the ending...I was pulled in and felt it all. Excellent work, my friend :) Thank you for participating!

  • Stephen Kramer Avitabileabout a month ago

    Oh wow! First off, congrats on the top story! I see why it got that! This was so good, and with such a limited use of words. I was trying to figure out what was happening along the way, and you revealed it little by little. I liked this surreal tale, then again, perhaps a tale too real. Excellent stuff!

  • Abdul Qayyumabout a month ago

    Your writing is incredibly engaging and vivid! I felt like I was right there in the scene alongside the characters." https://vocal.media/fiction/the-time-traveling-plumber

  • Great Top Story take on this challenge… so many excellent words included in this micro fiction! ‘My reasons remain cloaked, forever enlaced in a boundless mind.’👍🏼

  • Eleanor Harringtonabout a month ago

    People nowadays are really lost so this is all for you guys https://vocal.media/motivation/guiding-light-kpru0r8q

  • Novel Allenabout a month ago

    This is so sad yet relatable. I think this is how I feel these days about Vocal. 🙊🙈🙉🫠. Hoping this is not how you feel, if so hugs. Congrats.

  • real Jemaabout a month ago

    Have you ever found yourself feeling disconnected from reality

  • Natasha Collazoabout a month ago

    This was superb 🔥

  • Christy Munsonabout a month ago

    You’ve crafted a haunting one. Lamar! Congratulations on Top Story!

  • Dharrsheena Raja Segarranabout a month ago

    Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊

  • The Writer about a month ago

    Congratulations 👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻

  • Gerard DiLeoabout a month ago

    Very nice! Well deserved.

  • Andrea Corwin about a month ago

    Wow, this was really good!! Congrats on TS, loved it!

  • Donna Fox (HKB)about a month ago

    I loved the overall mood of this one, so dark and brooding!! Great work Lamar and congrats on Top Story!

  • Tiffany Gordon about a month ago

    Phenomenal work Lamar! BRAVO! 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾

  • D. D. Leeabout a month ago

    The best I’ve read today of the Top Stories. This is brilliant! Congrats on Top Story!

  • Babs Iversonabout a month ago

    Awesome story and it flowed so perfectly!!! Loved this!!!💕❤️❤️

  • Cathy holmesabout a month ago

    Congrats on the TS

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