Character Development
"Unlocking the Mystery of Human Mastery: A Comedy of Cosmic Ironies"
In the grand stage of existence, humans strut with pride, Believing they're powerful, on life's thrilling ride. Yet within their core, a locked abyss does dwell,
CosmicClipPublished 10 months ago in CritiqueA YA Story Looking for Input
*** This is basically an excerpt from a YA/Upper Middle grade story looking for critique.*** My main questions would be - from the perspective of a reader of this genre - does the story grab your attention? What needs to be added to make it more interesting? And, of course, if you notice any grammatical errors or clumsy sentences, feel free to point them out also. Add any critiques to the comment section, or PM if you would like it to be kept more quiet.
KJ AartilaPublished 10 months ago in CritiqueDoes The Quran Really Say To Kill Kafirs(disbelievers) or Is It a Rumor?
No need to mention that the Quran is the holiest scripture of Islam which is a religion of Abrahamic faith. The Holy Quran was revealed to Prophet Muhammad by the angel Gabriel(Jibreel). The Quran is believed to be the word of true and one God(Allah) which was revealed to this world within the course of around 22 years. The Quran contains 114 chapters and 6,666 verses.
Sharique KamalPublished 10 months ago in CritiqueSnow White and the Seven Dwarfs.
One day Snow White a very special little girl with a rather controlling mother in law, who despised her, as she desired all Snow Whites fathers love and affection for herself. preceeds to send her into the woods to collect daffodils.
Dawn EarnshawPublished 10 months ago in CritiqueWork
Consider yourself a "lazy" person but still want to start working from home, don't worry! There are steps you can take to overcome laziness and create a successful work-from-home routine. Here's how you can get started:
Ilya KozinetSPublished 10 months ago in CritiqueA Christmas Story Review
Since the Holidays are coming up, I thought I’d review a film which I think is perfectly appropriate for the occasion. And what better title to review than the timeless classic known as “A Christmas Story”? Since this movie was released in the year I was born in, this is yet another film that I’ve known pretty much my whole life. And I have seen this movie at least several times during my childhood. Now, what made this movie so special is that it wasn't really a Christmas story as the title implies, but rather, it was a drama with a few moments of humor here and there. And once you start watching it, you will quickly realize this isn’t your typical Christmas themed movie. It doesn’t revolve around the legend of Santa Claus and the myth about him traveling across the world to bring toys to children. No, this is a more realistic story that tells us that sometimes what we want isn’t really what we need. Originally released November 18th, 1983, this film is set in the 1940s, long before the time of the film's release, and long before digital age which we live in today. Anyway, the story in this film is basically a drama story told in the form of a narration by Ralphie when he has come of age, as he shares his childhood experiences with the audience about what happened to him on that particular day during the Holiday season. And needless to say, it was a Christmas that he would remember for a VERY long time. And let me tell you, this movie sure has left quite an impression on me that lasted for just as long. I watched this movie 30 years ago as a kid. And 30 years later, it’s high time I did a review of it. Though, keep in mind, I haven’t seen this movie in ages despite that I remember very specific parts of it by heart. So forgive me if some or all of these scenes are not in the correct order.
Kylecovey SmithPublished 10 months ago in CritiqueFrom Solitude to Success: The Journey of a Lonely Boy to a Thriving Entrepreneur
In the bustling city of dreams, there once lived a little boy named Alex. With no friends to call his own, he often found himself lost in the crowd, feeling like an outsider. While other children laughed and played together, Alex wandered through the streets, yearning for companionship. However, this lonely boy would grow to become an extraordinary entrepreneur, defying all odds and finding his place in the world of business.
Danel GarciaPublished 10 months ago in CritiqueTales of Tilly.
I looked at the broken mirror and the reflection was not of my own, that I saw looking back in the conservatory, it was a vine that looked like a snake had twisted and entwined itself around about us. It seemed as though the room was filling with steam, so I opened the windows at the top of the wrought iron staircase and instantly could feel the air and oxygen coming through. It was a hot summers day with the Sun out in full force glaring at the pained glass, showing every scratch from the cleaning of the windows over the years. The blinding refractions coming from all around the conservatory,the tiny droplets of water I had sprayed on the Elderflower. Hated the damn white flowers to give birth to the poisonous berries,the whole damn thing was irritatingingly devious,white petal flowers like whiter than white to show off virginity and then the red blood stained berries that represented the earth women of periods,these bleeds where your stomach would bloat and cramp like you had eaten the bloody berries causing severe stomach trauma.Then childbirth if you were cursed with such an infliction without a wedding ring.
Dawn EarnshawPublished 10 months ago in CritiqueMy Story as a 16-Year-Old Business Starter
Being a 16-year-old with big dreams of starting a business has been both exciting and challenging. The journey has been filled with moments of inspiration and determination, but also times of uncertainty and doubt. As I venture into the world of entrepreneurship, I find myself at a crossroads, unsure of the next steps to take. Here's my story of how I've navigated the ups and downs of starting a business and seeking guidance to overcome the obstacles that come my way.
Danel GarciaPublished 10 months ago in CritiqueFiction Critique Request
I woke to a lot of changes on Vocal again. I was not on Vocal a lot yesterday, Thursday, so I didn't see the new communities, Writers, Chapters, BookClub, and, Critique announced until today. I Only just found out the winners were announced for the Pitch Your Pilot Challenge. I didn't place - that's fine!
Paul StewartPublished 10 months ago in CritiqueGrasshoppers (Work in Progress)
Note: I started this a long time ago and left it in a desk drawer with a plan that remained unfinished. These are only the first seven chapters (I wrote about thirty-three pages), and I would like some feedback on this work. It is based on an actual trip I took with some friends while in Japan, but with a lot of my imagination thrown in. I just wonder if I can take this somewhere...
Kendall DefoePublished 10 months ago in CritiqueRequest for Critique
Well, I'll be honest when I say that I have no idea how this community is supposed to work. So, here is a foray into the unknown!
Matthew FrommPublished 10 months ago in Critique