It's okay that the animation isn't great.

It's fine that some of the acting is stinted.

But why does it take an hour for things to start?

And who the fuck put Peter Parker in a turtleneck?

Spider-Man: Lotus in Fifty Words

A short critique of a long fan film

It's okay that the animation isn't great.

It's fine that some of the acting is stinted.

Even the bad monologues are passable.



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