Tortured, Undercover digs too deep for Freddy,
As he slips under Mr. White’s, no
Larry’s protection,
Knowing the diamond heist was always going to fail.
Larry comforts him,
Sticking his neck out for him,
Holds him as he bleeds out and even gets shot for him,
A damn American tragedy.
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Melissa Ingoldsby
I am a published author on Patheos,
I am Bexley by Resurgence Novels
The Half Paper Moon on Golden Storyline Books for Kindle.
My novella The Job and Atonement will be published this year by JMS Books
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I really love the way you executed this critique! 😍 Beautifully done and very intriguing. I've never seen this but I feel I might have to now! I've been on a bit of a break from Vocal but I'll be back soon to read more of your amazing words! 🤗
I actually liked this the other day but didn’t comment, sorry. I don’t remember this film well, just the ear, music scene. I use to be obsessed with the Kill Bill films but haven’t watched for years. I love the structure of your critique, I just wish I could remember the characters you’ve referenced. 😊
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Oh this was so tragic! Excellent review Merly!
Brilliant!
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Awesome!!! Loved it!!!
Excellent work!
Brilliant!