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Two stops too soon

A story of strangers, silence, and the lives we imagine.

By Jordan DalzellPublished about a year ago 1 min read
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The train had barely left the last station when the passenger noticed the stranger sitting across the aisle. Noticed — not in the obvious way, but like how your eyes land on a text message on someone else’s phone and linger a second too long. The stranger had a quiet presence — the kind that didn’t ask to be observed but drew attention anyway. They were reading something with a worn cover, mouthing the words like each line needed tasting.

The passenger leaned their head against the window, letting the rhythm of the train fill the silence growing between glances and imagined introductions.

Could this be the start of something? A first coffee turns into a first date, a whirlwind romance that becomes weekends away, forgotten toothbrushes, shared playlists, inside jokes. They fall into each other’s lives like it was always meant to happen — effortless, electric, inevitable.

Then come the deeper layers: a shared apartment, a stray puppy they weren’t planning to keep, quiet arguments about money and mess and whether they’re really listening. Late-night reconciliations on the kitchen floor. A proposal over takeout. A wedding with too much rain and just enough laughter. And beneath it all, the feeling that this fleeting moment on a train was always meant to lead here.

Life rushes by. Tough days at work become quiet evenings on the sofa. A surprise child, then another. The one-bedroom flat becomes a cottage tucked into the countryside.

A cluttered table covered in schoolwork and bills, the beautiful mundane of everyday nothingness. Christmases. Birthdays. All because of a moment that could have been.

Pets grow old. Children move out. But the constant remains: the passenger and the stranger, growing old together — all from a single glance.

The train pulls to a stop. Before the passenger can speak, the stranger is already on the platform — gone. A lifetime missed. A breath never taken.

The passenger slumps back into their seat.

Outside, the stranger glances at the fogged window. A silhouette. A flicker of familiarity stirs — then fades, as they turn to leave.

Love

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Jordan Dalzell

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    Written by Jordan Dalzell