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The Serum

A Story Every Day in 2024 Feb 24th 55/366

By Rachel DeemingPublished 2 months ago 2 min read
The Serum
Photo by Diana Polekhina on Unsplash

"And you really think this will work?"

Mark Denver, as CEO of a floundering pharmaceutical company, needed to hear an emphatic "Yes!" from his researchers in order to be able to sleep well again. If what they had achieved was real, then this would revolutionise obesity management in the health sector forever. And he would reap the rewards: fame, money, success. He could feel the benefits padding his life out already.

"Trials to date have been extremely successful."

The researcher changed the screen to show what could only be described as a muscular mouse. Mark had never seen such a rodent powerhouse.

"And before?" Mark queried.

The researcher clicked again and there was a video of a mouse, maybe a little larger than average but definitely not the strong, physical specimen that had been displayed previously.

"So, human trials?"

The researcher's face lit up with glee.

"Oh, yes!" And then with less enthusiasm, "Please."

Mark could feel a trip to the Lamborghini garage in his near future.


"A revolutionary new treatment for obesity has been launched today, amid much hype, giving a new meaning to the phrase "body sculpting"..."

Mark smiled as he sipped champagne watching the TV report. He was the leader of a revolution and it felt so good. He took a deep breath and inhaled the sweet smell of success.


"So, we will inject the serum and then after 20 minutes, we'll be able to shape you. Just try and relax. It won't take a moment."

Rachel had been chubby most of her life. She loved to eat. Exercise was an anathema. Dieting was a temporary fix.

But here was the answer! She couldn't wait to see her new form!


It was after the moulding. Rachel gazed at her reflection. She'd been manipulated like a lump of Play Doh. The sculpting has been successful they said. Her stomach was now flat, but she had enormous breasts, like beach balls. Turning, she espied her incredibly enlarged buttocks crafted for body balance. Her contoured torso bulged, ridged in its depths, her arms bulging like cartoon clouds.

Muscle everywhere. No fat in sight. Everything accentuated. Like a caricature.

She looked absolutely hideous.


366 words

This story was sort of inspired by the wish to be thinner with minimum effort, hence the character's name. But ultimately, I'm no fool for cosmetic products and wouldn't consider the serum. The short cut would be nice though...

Thanks for stopping by! If you do read it, please do drop a comment as I love to interact with my readers.


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About the Creator

Rachel Deeming

Mum, blogger, crafter, reviewer, writer, traveller: I love to write and I am not limited by form. Here, you will find stories, articles, opinion pieces, poems, all of which reflect me: who I am, what I love, what I feel, how I view things.

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  • Randy Wayne Jellison-Knock2 months ago

    If solutions could be found in a syringe..., ...I guess they'd be found in a syringe. But I'm not holding my breath.

  • Mark Gagnon2 months ago

    I've spent most of my life working out as well as physical jobs but never achieved that bodybuilder body. In reality, as long as you're healthy and happy, the rest is nonsense. I still work out most days but it's too battle with old age. The drugs are a con to make people more money.

  • D.K. Shepard2 months ago

    So squirmy! Both the money obsession and the being “manipulated like a lump of Play Doh”! Ah! Squirmed again!

  • Novel Allen2 months ago

    We scoff at it when young, vanity greed industry. Yet I now eye my mirror and wonder if I were rich, would I? Nose. eyes, neck, buttocks etc. They I remember Kayne's mother.

  • Jay Kantor2 months ago

    Dear Rd - Re; your "Bits." My motto: We wouldn't worry so much about what people thought of us; if we realized how little they did. No pain ~ no gain; er loss. JiBud

  • John Cox2 months ago

    Like plastic surgery gone wrong. Really wrong! Great cautionary tale, Rachel. But why did you name the victim of the experiment after yourself? Didn’t that feel a little squirmy?

  • Shirley Belk2 months ago

    What an industry of vanity driven addicts we have become.

  • L.C. Schäfer2 months ago

    I love this. Careful what you wish for!

  • D. J. Reddall2 months ago

    Change is not always improvement! A slick satire of the superficial vanity of contemporary humans and the greed it satiates.

  • Alex H Mittelman 2 months ago

    This is great! There’s a book by Stephen King called Thinner I think you’d like! 😏

  • Hannah Moore2 months ago

    Crikey, can you imagine. I'm seeing more and more weird lips around here, that's bad enough.

  • Omgggg, I would never try this either! Big boobs and butt are a nightmare! But I won't be surprised if this moulding thing becomes a trend in the future. Loved your story!

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