The Jewel
They took something precious to me, and I'm going to get it back. No matter the cost. (FWIW: the cost is at least a month's lunch money.)
Meet the team:
The Driver: my older brother, Danny. Has a provisional license, and connections. Namely:
The Crim: Will. Expert at getting in and out of places. Cool head in a crisis.
The Artist: Jack's a girl, but don't point this out. Local graffiti-ist. My friend from school.
Guy Inside: Elaine. Used to go to school with Mum. Posted info online when the Jewel came in. Probably getting fired.
The Cover Story: Brian. School bully. Hates me. His garage is the hiding place. Cost: a month's lunch money.
We're here. Hoodies on, CCTV spray-painted. Will got us in. No security stuff inside. We get what -who- we came for and go.
They'd wrestled her out on a pole, yelping. She's never hurt anyone. If they'd walked her on a lead, she'd have followed. Quiet. Trusting. They were rough. She panicked, struggled to get back to us. I screamed her name. She fought harder. They yanked, choking her. Dad held me tight, my snot streaking his shirt. She looked back, frantic. Her eyes spoke. "Why don't they help me?" I felt her heart break.
Now she's smiling, whole. So am I. My Jewel.
About the Creator
L.C. Schäfer
Flexing the writing muscle.
Never so naked as I am on a page. Subscribe for "nudes".
I'm also Twitter if you'd like to connect elsewhere.
I value feedback, and reciprocate reads and comments.
Also writing under the name S.E. Holz
Reader insights
Outstanding
Excellent work. Looking forward to reading more!
Top insights
Excellent storytelling
Original narrative & well developed characters
Compelling and original writing
Creative use of language & vocab
Heartfelt and relatable
The story invoked strong personal emotions
Easy to read and follow
Well-structured & engaging content
Eye opening
Niche topic & fresh perspectives
Expert insights and opinions
Arguments were carefully researched and presented
Masterful proofreading
Zero grammar & spelling mistakes
On-point and relevant
Writing reflected the title & theme
Keep reading
More stories from L.C. Schäfer and writers in Fiction and other communities.
The Vocal Plus Secret Society
+ MANY YEARS IN THE FUTURE + + ACTUALLY, NOT THAT MANY + The moment an original piece is written, or even partially written - on any device, even if it's not (willingly) shared on the Internet - the words are extracted and replicated multiple times all over the web. That's all the Internet is, now.
By L.C. Schäfer4 months ago in Fiction
Comments (54)
Any story that ends with a cute puppy is a winner! Love it ❤️
Sweet ending, and great pic at the end!
What a face... coutchy-coo little doggie. Super L.C.!
Very innovative structure. I love minimalist stories! Congratulations on your Top Story!
Awesome story. Love the structure! Congratulations 🥇 Look at Jewell smile! 😎
Congratulations own Top Story! I loved this one the first time I read it and I am so happy you are getting the recognition for it that you deserve! 🎉💖
GREAT WORK 💜KEEP THEM COMING !!!!
NICE
Aw, such a sweet ending! This was full of so much suspense -- loved it! 😍 Congrats on an amazing Top Story!! 🤗❤️❤️
Congratulations
Every time I think I’ve read the best piece of your writing, you go ahead and make another new favourite. Such a wholesomely unexpected take on the prompt. Thanks for making me smile
I can see the clip of the crew with a narrator's voice and their name splashed on a still image. Very capturing style. Congrats in TS
Interesting
Nailed it man.
You nailed it. Interest, suspense, and a happy finale. Congratulations
A very relatable story for us dog owners and lovers. What a jewel!
Excellent title and story, J.C. Congrats!!!
God I love that cute photo! Great story, so well done!
This is so beautifully written. And so extremely precious! Enjoyed the heck out of this! Jewel must be protected at all cost! 🥹
Expertly structured and damn good message. Love this Top Story!
Love your intro, L.C.! Brilliant! Such a great take on the challenge. So glad there was a happy ending!!! Congrats on top story!!!
Love it! Has that young high-stakes edge, and it reads like a savvy to-the-point neo-noir piece. Excellent!
Love This 💕
Loved this L.C.! This story really pulled at my heart strings! Such a great story and so heart warming!
Fantastic!!! Left some love!!! Congratulations on T S!!!💖💖💕