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The Jewel

They took something precious to me, and I'm going to get it back. No matter the cost. (FWIW: the cost is at least a month's lunch money.)

By L.C. SchäferPublished 4 months ago Updated 4 months ago 1 min read
Top Story - June 2023
The Jewel
Photo by Jannes Jacobs on Unsplash

Meet the team:

The Driver: my older brother, Danny. Has a provisional license, and connections. Namely:

The Crim: Will. Expert at getting in and out of places. Cool head in a crisis.

The Artist: Jack's a girl, but don't point this out. Local graffiti-ist. My friend from school.

Guy Inside: Elaine. Used to go to school with Mum. Posted info online when the Jewel came in. Probably getting fired.

The Cover Story: Brian. School bully. Hates me. His garage is the hiding place. Cost: a month's lunch money.

We're here. Hoodies on, CCTV spray-painted. Will got us in. No security stuff inside. We get what -who- we came for and go.

They'd wrestled her out on a pole, yelping. She's never hurt anyone. If they'd walked her on a lead, she'd have followed. Quiet. Trusting. They were rough. She panicked, struggled to get back to us. I screamed her name. She fought harder. They yanked, choking her. Dad held me tight, my snot streaking his shirt. She looked back, frantic. Her eyes spoke. "Why don't they help me?" I felt her heart break.

Now she's smiling, whole. So am I. My Jewel.

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AdventureYoung AdultShort StoryMicrofiction

About the Creator

L.C. Schäfer

Flexing the writing muscle.

Never so naked as I am on a page. Subscribe for "nudes".

I'm also Twitter if you'd like to connect elsewhere.

I value feedback, and reciprocate reads and comments.

Also writing under the name S.E. Holz

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    The story invoked strong personal emotions

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  • C. H. Richard24 days ago

    Any story that ends with a cute puppy is a winner! Love it ❤️

  • J. Delaney-Howe24 days ago

    Sweet ending, and great pic at the end!

  • Roy Stevens4 months ago

    What a face... coutchy-coo little doggie. Super L.C.!

  • Cendrine Marrouat4 months ago

    Very innovative structure. I love minimalist stories! Congratulations on your Top Story!

  • J. S. Wade4 months ago

    Awesome story. Love the structure! Congratulations 🥇 Look at Jewell smile! 😎

  • Donna Fox4 months ago

    Congratulations own Top Story! I loved this one the first time I read it and I am so happy you are getting the recognition for it that you deserve! 🎉💖

  • MARIE ODEMS 4 months ago


  • Gina C.4 months ago

    Aw, such a sweet ending! This was full of so much suspense -- loved it! 😍 Congrats on an amazing Top Story!! 🤗❤️❤️

  • Neesem Khan4 months ago


  • J. R. Lowe4 months ago

    Every time I think I’ve read the best piece of your writing, you go ahead and make another new favourite. Such a wholesomely unexpected take on the prompt. Thanks for making me smile

  • Gal Mux4 months ago

    I can see the clip of the crew with a narrator's voice and their name splashed on a still image. Very capturing style. Congrats in TS

  • Interesting

  • Nobody4 months ago

    Nailed it man.

  • JBaz4 months ago

    You nailed it. Interest, suspense, and a happy finale. Congratulations

  • Chelas Montanye4 months ago

    A very relatable story for us dog owners and lovers. What a jewel!

  • Lamar Wiggins4 months ago

    Excellent title and story, J.C. Congrats!!!

  • Heather Zieffle 4 months ago

    God I love that cute photo! Great story, so well done!

  • Ashley Ball4 months ago

    This is so beautifully written. And so extremely precious! Enjoyed the heck out of this! Jewel must be protected at all cost! 🥹

  • Dana Stewart4 months ago

    Expertly structured and damn good message. Love this Top Story!

  • Kristen Balyeat4 months ago

    Love your intro, L.C.! Brilliant! Such a great take on the challenge. So glad there was a happy ending!!! Congrats on top story!!!

  • A. Lenae4 months ago

    Love it! Has that young high-stakes edge, and it reads like a savvy to-the-point neo-noir piece. Excellent!

  • Michael Moses4 months ago

    Love This 💕

  • Donna Fox4 months ago

    Loved this L.C.! This story really pulled at my heart strings! Such a great story and so heart warming!

  • Babs Iverson4 months ago

    Fantastic!!! Left some love!!! Congratulations on T S!!!💖💖💕

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