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The Death of Old-Fashioned Dying

Anything can be revolutionised.

By Amelia MoorePublished 5 months ago 16 min read
Top Story - May 2023

There are some nights meant to be dark and stormy, to fit the mood of the reader and the tone of the events destined to happen. A dark and stormy night is a powerful metaphor. One can liken the personality of a particularly shifty individual to that of a rainstorm, or can provide in the story an obstacle to overcome.

The stereotype is overdone, the phrase is dramatised, the words used for the amusement of the writer… and still.

So, for all intents and purposes: It was a dark and stormy night.

Mary Whilladanger had been running her bar since her husband burned their finances to the ground, and she had become quite good at it. Her reputation for the best liquor miles around had attracted alcoholics far and wide, and she could handle them, too. She was a brawny sort of woman who didn’t tolerate annoying drunks or sleaze balls in suits slyly hitting on young women. She threw them out promptly and effectively and they didn’t come back.

Because Mary Whilladanger’s bar was so successful, she attracted more than human customers, sometimes. She’d been alive for over two hundred years thanks to this.

On a dark and stormy night, Death walked into her bar.

Death gloomily stirred his straw around, gazing at the contents of his glass in a way thousands of sad people attempting to drink away their problems had done before. He looked almost human, except for the hooded cloak.

“Mary,” sighs Death. “Get me a cherry soda, please.”

Mary shot him a withering look. Like many proud bar owners, she didn’t approve of such a request. But like many humans, she did not want to die, so she passed his drink across the table, leaned down conspiratorially, and said, “Why you got your cape in a knot?”

“Not a cape.”

“Dress, then.”

Closer, thought Death. He gave another heavy sigh, and somewhere in the countryside a flock of sheep keeled over and died. “I’m tired, Mary.”

“Go sleep.”

“No, I--” Death gestured. “I’m tired of this. Working all the time. You know I’ve never had a vacation? Never even had a weekend off, without some asshole jumping off a bridge somewhere, or a small army that just had to raid a radioactive wasteland that very second. Bugger this for a lark.”

“I hate to break it to you, honey,” said Mary, who was quietly trying to figure out what his last sentence meant (she was American) “but I don’t think that’s how you were, well, designed. You’re not supposed to take breaks or get tired. You’re meant to just… keep going, I suppose.”

Death considered that for all of half a second, then said briskly, “Shut up,” and downed his neighbour’s beer in one gulp. Nobody saw it happen. Mary moved on.

Half a mile away, a child drowned in a river. Nobody saw it happen.

Harley Daniels was labelled as a ‘precocious’ child from an early age on, and the word stuck with her, though it had no attachment to her personality whatsoever. Legend has it Harley Daniels the Precocious Little Girl had received her title one dark and stormy night (see? it changes the mood!) when her poor, slightly illiterate father had been sitting at the kitchen table, hands over his ears, while little Harley screamed in the corner. She had been sentenced to a time-out and was not taking it well.

Harley’s mother dropped to the table, exhausted, a second baby nestled against her chest. She had the wild-eyed air of a soldier who’s had a bomb explode beside their ear, and is trying to figure out if they’re dead or not. She and her husband shared a look as Harley’s wailing (appropriate for a two-year-old, yet still horrible) continued. Her father slowly lowered his hands. “Precocious or something, isn't she?” he shouted over the noise.

His wife laughed. “We’ll call it that.”

And so they did.

Harley was a demon of a little girl, with red pigtails like fire blazing from her head, and lungs put to good use by means of screaming, threatening, whining, and snarling. It is believed that her father thought ‘precocious’ was a sort of fast-acting medicine that caused intense, all-consuming pain for those who took it.

Anyway Harley was dead, but in a new, experimental way. At her funeral stood her mother, her father, her younger siblings, her killer, and a naive homeless man who had thought it was some sort of charity event where they'd give him food. He was uncomfortably planning his escape.

Harley and Death stood off to the side, watching the events unfold. Death had distanced himself a careful three feet from the girl, learning quickly she was a biter.

Harley sniffed and examined her nails. “Do they have gels in heaven?”


“How about polish?”


She considered, rocking on her toes. “They got… shoes?”

“Not really,” Death answered, remembering with a slight shudder the open-toed sandals worn by all angels and the recent habit angels had of pairing them with socks.

“What about stuffed animals?”


“What do they have? I'm not going to Heaven if there’s nothing to do there!” She raised her voice into a wail.

“Shut up,” sighed Death, and he squatted in the grass. He racked his brain for something to placate her.“They have surveys for you to fill out.”

She snapped her mouth shut and glared at him. “What’s a survey?”

“You answer questions. Mostly about your death. They also have rainbows to dance on, and old friends to talk to. You’ll be at peace.”

“Ew,” Harley said. She plunked herself down on the grass and picked at the hem of her pink tutu.

“So,” Death sad. “What do you think of the way you died?”

She shrugged. “It was fine, I guess.”

“Fine?” Death said eagerly. “What was good about it? What did you like?”

“I dunno,” Harley mumbled, squinting into the grass. “I don’t remember much. I just know I was at the supermarket, with Mum, and she wouldn’t let me get a Kinder egg, and I got all mad. Only this much, though.” she added, pinching her fingers together to illustrate how little she was mad.

“Go on,” Death said, adding in a laugh like he’d been taught in a seminar on Human Emotions. On the other side of the planet, a South Korean man furiously hacking his way through the computer of eleven-year-old ‘Whitey’ Scott slumped against his keyboard and died dreaming of the secrets he thought he was uncovering from US politician Mr. Scott’s Fortnite account.

“I didn’t like him jumping out at me,” said Harley, twisting her pigtails round her finger. “That was real scary.”

“But did it work?” Death asked. “Do I need to change the color to blue, or pink, or something more vibrant?”

“I don't think so, the green was good. Real pretty. But why’d you do it that way, cause that isn't how people normally die, that’s what my mum tells me.” She glances over at her own funeral and swallows. “Told me, I guess.”

“Hmmm,” Death murmured, straightening. His black cloak-- dress-- ripples behind him, and his eyes in their skeleton sockets are gleaming. He looked demented, which was his way of representing excitement. Harley glanced at him nervously.

“Yes,” Death declared. “Oh, yes, I think this will work out very nicely. Well done, young Harley.” He patted her awkwardly on her fire-bright head, and she was too puzzled to snap at him.

"Well then, glad we sorted that out. Your Guardian Angel will be along shortly. In the meantime, sit down, relax, watch your funeral for a bit. But try not to wander off, okay, we don’t need anymore restless souls stuck on the planet.” Death straightened and gave a little bounce. “Oh Harley, you might have just revolutionized dying! Enjoy Heaven.” He was gone as quickly as he’d appeared, and Harley was left with nothing but a patch of blackened and dead grass.

She frowned for a minute, but turned her focus to her funeral. They’d finished lowering her casket into the ground. She kinda wanted to go over and look. Her parents were done saying nice things that weren’t true about her, and had started thanking guests for coming. The first person they talked to was her killer.

“Hi there, Harley,” said her Guardian Angel, appearing out of thin air beside her shoulder. She smiled, blond and eternally beautiful hair rippling in the wind. Somewhere, a homeless man found twenty dollars on the ground.

“Ready to go?” she asked warmly.

Harley eyed her, from her glowing features to the open-toed sandals paired with lime green and purple socks.

“Do they have gels in Heaven?” she asked.

The day he died, Jason Jackson was destined to die at the hands of an overly eager mall cop when he and his two (admittedly not very bright) best friends decided to rob a store. If he had died the proper way, embarrassingly and stupidly, he and his friends would have made headlines in the newspapers all over the country, and he would have become a beacon for adjustments to the educational system.

The fact that he didn’t die like that was already a problem.

When he woke up the morning he died, there was a green glow somewhere above his head. He tried to squint at it, but couldn't make out the words and gave up in less than twenty seconds.

He stepped from his house and people stared. Jason, bless him, decided that his new shampoo was doing the trick and grinned his way down the street. The words above him read as follows:


The words lingered in everyone’s minds as though they had been shouted, and the people surrounding Jason had the sudden and inexplicable urge to kill him.

Jason’s grin faded as humanity surrounded him like panthers.

“Is there something on—” he started, but then something hit him on the head and he dropped into darkness as black as a mall cop’s handgun.

And the world lost its ever-loving mind.

As a human, it isn’t hard to imagine people taking to this new method quite quickly.

There were the protesters, of course: the Christians, the charity workers, the nurses, the pack of fools insisting it was the government-- but they were hushed up soon.

It made headlines. The stories-- people who fought back, people who tried to hide, family members who killed each other, the one hilarious newscaster who, in the middle of her segment, suddenly had a green light flashing over her head and was tackled by the cameraman, receiving millions of views and laughing-so-hard-it’s-crying faces on YouTube.

Humans lost empathy in a short twenty years.

It was quite quickly a norm-- people would ask, “Ever killed anyone?” on first dates. There were internet dweebs who, upon seeing the green light blaring above their own heads, would quickly press ‘record’ and ask their killer to upload it after their death. Mothers and fathers, poor creatures, spent sleepless nights dreading the green light-- or as it was shortly called, the Green Light-- and worried for the occasions children came home murderers after a dark day on the playground.

There wasn't such thing as 'normal' deaths anymore. Car accidents became more common because there were never any fatalities. Illnesses disappeared almost overnight. Countries got tired of fighting wars where no one died, and men simply screamed insults about their penises from behind machine guns. The whole 'killing' part didn't seem to bother anyone, because in essence, everyone else had become Grim Reapers-- on the scheduled date of a death, a green light simply flared above the head of the victim without any need for fuss or bothering to fetch the souls.

It created quite the culture of fear. But also one of terrible enjoyment, and many were torn about which they preferred.

Death stretched out on a beach in Hawaii and watched his plan unfold around him with the lazy contentment of a snake whose hunger had been satiated with a large family of mice. Over by the waves, out of nowhere, a green light began flashing over a girl's head, and it was almost funny the number of people who rushed to her right away. He grinned as he watched. He rather thought putting in the instinct to know exactly how to kill into their heads had been an excellent idea, and lo, it had paid off.

There was a faint popping sound beside him, and suddenly another Divine Being was standing there, in blue crocks and lace-up brown robes, glaring at him.

“We need to talk,” said The Human.

Death lolled his head to the side to regard him for a long moment. The Human glared back at him.

“You’ve got sunscreen on you,” Death said finally. “Right on your nosey. Thought you didn’t burn anymore.”

“I don’t, you ass,” snapped The Human, scrubbing furiously at his face. Death grinned, watching him. “Where did-- oh! Fucker.”

“I have fun now,” Death said delightedly. “Did you know I can do that? I sure didn’t.”

The Human shifted his weight in the sand, scowling down at the figure of Death, sprawled out in sunglasses and black shorts that fit him rather well. His skin, usually so moon-pale, seemed to have gotten a bit of a tan. His blond hair had darkened a shade or two from white, and he even had a bit of scruff around his jaw.

“Thought you were a girl,” he finally says, gruffly.

“For a couple hundred years,” Death says, “but nowadays it's a lot more dangerous to be a girl. They invented something called trafficking, did you hear about that? Plus it turns out human men are more functional, in certain areas anyway.”

The Human had no dignified response to this.

“What do you want, then, you big bloody moron?” asked Death, settling himself in a chair that hadn’t been there 0.000002 seconds ago. “I use bad words now too.” He smiled.

His good mood was annoying, and The Human remembered his purpose in coming here.

“Listen,” he began. “This isn’t working. I know you’re tired, but this is really, really bad.”

“Why?” Death asked. “People are still dying and the people not-dying are happy.”

“You’ve turned them into savages!” snapped The Human, sitting down in a second chair that hadn’t been there 0.000002 seconds ago.

“They were always savages,” Death argued. “I just brought it out of them a little bit more. Like putting fangs into a cobra’s mouth. They always had the capacity to bite, they just didn’t before.”

“But cobras have self-control,” The Human pointed out. “You and I both know that humans don’t. Not as a whole.”

“Hey,” Death said, frowning and pushing his sunglasses up his nose. “They don’t have to kill each other, I’m just giving them the option to. It’s their choice. Really, the humans are at fault here.”

The Human took a deep breath. Never was he as vexed as when he was talking to other immortal beings-- particularly the Grim Reaper.

He had started out his life quite normally, living on earth till his death at twenty-seven years old. The next thing he knew, he was standing in front of a large court of deities, and they were announcing he was to be the first Human representative of the universe for the next couple eternities-- from what he could make out, Annie (the universe’s resident witch) had won a bet against Chaos, and his employment was the result.

It wasn’t that different, really, from life on Earth. It just meant that once every fifty years or so he had to give a seminar on human emotions and how to better understand them to a group of immortal beings. To do so, he made PowerPoints they promptly mocked. It was always a disaster. Chaos had taught the others to make spitballs a few years back, the only one who did his homework was the deity of Thought, and Death had learned to draw caricatures that he liked to pass around the class.

The Human’s real name had been forgotten to him long ago, along with all memory of his first stage of existence. He might have minded if he knew he didn't remember. But otherwise, he was the voice of reason up above-- the annoying one who said things like, “Maybe we should slow down the drinking so we can get home safely,” or “Are you really sure we want to egg her house? Think about the cost of damage we’d have to pay!” You couldn’t exactly hate him because he was always right. But you could say mean things behind his back, and that was what the others did.

“Look,” sighed The Human. “You deserve a break. You’re right. But this isn’t the proper way to go about it. This situation is only going to get worse, and we need to end it now. Get back on the job.”

“Why should I?” glared Death, rising from his seat. “So I can go back to never taking a break and listening to the dead cry and clutch at my robes? ‘Oh, take me back, pleaseeee, I have children to look after! I’m not done living, I have more I want to do! I didn’t mean to jump, not really, I was just very sad but now I’ve changed my mind and it's your job to make me happy again!” He said all this in a horrible, mocking tone. The Human took an involuntary step back.

“I’m sick of it all,” snapped Death. “I’m done. And if humans don’t have enough self-control, or empathy, or willpower, to not kill each other when the option arises, then they aren’t worth the trouble. It’ll be fine!”

“It’s your job!” The Human said angrily. “The sole reason for your creation! You can’t just quit!”

“I--” Death ran a hand through his hair in frustration and fell silent for a minute. He lets out a heavy sigh. Annoying, attractive, always-right guy, he grumbled. He couldn’t see a scenario where The Human didn’t convince him. It was very irritating.

“Fine,” he said. “I’ll give it two months. If this thing gets worse, I’ll come back. But it might not be a disaster!”

“It’s already a disaster,” said The Human, who looked relieved. “But thank you, for being reasonable. Enjoy your soda.” He vanished as quickly as he’d appeared. Death took a sip of the root beer that hadn’t been in his hand 0.000002 seconds ago, and gazed out over the beach.

He tasted the words aloud. “It’ll be… fine. Fine. Fine, fine, fine.”

He sighed. He couldn't even lie to himself.

Pushed in smoothly by the white crest of the waves, the body of a girl who should have been killed by a shark that day washed up. A little boy plodded his way over, squatted to consider her for a moment, then picked up a fistful of sand and began patting it onto her face. His sister hurried to join him and they made dopey delighted noises together, squishing the dead girl’s eyes and lips and cheeks.

Yikes, the Grim Reaper thought, and downed his soda.

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Amelia Moore

17-year-old writer who hopes to write stories for a living someday-- failing that, I'd like to become a mermaid.

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  • Tymara Howard5 months ago

    Congratulations on having your story selected as the top one!

  • Ash Taylor5 months ago

    This instantly gripped me, and I love the dark comedy aspect. Good job!

  • Naomi Gold5 months ago

    Some harsh truths in this fiction. Sometimes I wonder if the only thing holding some people back from doing wrong is the threat of legal consequences. I loved the humor. How dare those angels wear socks with sandals. 😆

  • Ahamed Thousif5 months ago

    Congratz Top Story...

  • Ahamed Thousif5 months ago

    Amazing Work!!! Read the related story -

  • Deasun T. Smyth5 months ago

    Yikes! This story was a bit dark. Great job, love the comedic lines in some of the parts. Congratulations on your top story.

  • L.C. Schäfer5 months ago

    Congrats on the top story! I would have had something to say about if this one hadn't been picked 😁

  • Melissa Ingoldsby5 months ago

    That ending was so good. I loved your style. You gotta write a novel.

  • L.C. Schäfer5 months ago

    Usually, I pick out the bit that stood out to me, but that was hard because there were lots of stand out bits here. I'm gonna go with, "She had the wild-eyed air of a soldier who’s had a bomb explode beside their ear, and is trying to figure out if they’re dead or not." This bit was REAL. It sang to me. That look is familiar to anyone who has dropped in unannounced on a postpartum mother.

  • L.C. Schäfer5 months ago


  • I meant to leave a comment earlier! didn’t think it would get approved so quickly, ha! This is a story I wrote a couple of years ago and put on the website for a contest… just republishing it bc the grammar was ✨atrocious✨. Anyway, I thought it was cute. Forgot I wrote it until a couple days ago when I was going through my stories.

  • Good grief, Amelia! How do you come up with this stuff. Absolutely morbidly comic genius--with a commentary on human nature thrown in for good measure! Yikes! Another unqualified masterpiece!

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