“Get help.” He cried.
“Why?”
“If you don’t, everyone will die.”
Without another word his little sister runs.
Through the afternoon and into the chilly night the young boy remains unmoving. His tiny body shivers uncontrollably, yet he stays.
The howling of wolves grows closer, golden orbs shining in the dark, yet he stays.
Exhausted, eyes heavy, he refuses to leave.
Morning comes bursting forth with rays of warmth. Like a dream, he hears voices crying out, far and distant. In tender loving arms, he’s carried away.
Because of his courage, the Dike held.
About the Creator
JBaz
I have enjoyed writing for most of my life, never professionally.
I wish to now share my stories with others, lets see where it goes.
Born and raised on the Canadian Prairies, I currently reside on the West Coast. I call both places home.
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I promise her. I'd do anything for her. She's my mom. Even as Lanie and Deanna are flying home, Mom is scrappy fighting dying. She lays too still in that too-big bed with all the toasty white hospital blankets, in the south tower, at the broad end of a long slow-turning corner that delivers me again to her private room with the view she can't see through, with the beeping that tells us nothing new, and all these ice chips she can't swallow, and a flood of well-intentioned nurses who cannot do a damned thing all the same.
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Comments (8)
This is beautifully written, the imagery and sense of urgency that you brought to the characters really lended well to the overall impact! Nice work Jason!
Transformed for a minute to the scene. You captured so much in so few words and I like the addition of the wolves. ❤️
I remember this story! Love how you retold it. You even got the wolves involved. (In one of the versions I think the boy was fond of crying wolf, or at least being mischievous. Well done. :)
When I read about "the Dike" I was thinking that there was going to be a flood happening and that he's holding the doors back from stopping a flood coming in and sweeping away his whole village. The only other thing I could think of is a fire that's keeping away the wolves, stopping a pack of wolves from running through the town, picking off livestock, and even the occasional child/baby. It reminds me of when I would go hunting with my dad in the early morning hours, and the sun wouldn't be up yet. The sky would be dark, and when the sun would rise, the cold air would sink and it'd be freezing for several hours until the air warmed up again.
Aww, what a wonderful retelling of this story!! I do see now how are stories are linked :) Great work!!
Beautiful story of courage. Well done.
I love the ending , well done 👍
Amazing act of courage despite the dangers lurking. Great read, J.