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A fairytale retelling

By Rachel M.JPublished 2 months ago Updated 2 months ago 1 min read
Top Story - February 2024
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Frostbite bloomed in Anya’s feet. There were holes in her boots - so many in fact that she may have swapped her shoes with slicks of Swiss cheese, and wouldn’t have noticed a difference. She yearned to free herself from the sludge that was bloating her toes… but her father would never allow it. Her boots, along with Anya herself, cost more than they were worth.

“You are not to come home until every box is sold!” Her father grumbled, as he pushed her down the decrepit stairs. She landed knee-deep in the snow, followed by a sack of matchboxes. Without complaint, she picked herself up, heaved the rucksack, and got to work.

So many doors did she knock upon that Christmas Eve that her periwinkle hands began to split. Her hearty thud of a greeting faded to a pulse, until eventually all she could muster was a tap at the windows. She watched; the merriment inside each snowglobe home showcased to her precisely what she would not have even if she were to sell every box. With her heart heavy, as well as her rucksack, she trekked home.

Forethought had led her to prepare a bale of hay beneath the stairs. She bundled beneath, and with skeletal fingers, procured a match, and struck. The flame barely blinked. She thumbed the hay, thoughtfully... As it was, it wouldn't warm her through the night, but with a little kindling… “Just one more,” she promised, as she struck again,

“Father will never know.”

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Rachel M.J

Magical realist

I like to write about things behaving how they shouldn't ~

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  • Denise E Lindquist2 months ago

    Congratulations on Top Story!

  • Dariusz 2 months ago

    Congratulations on top story :)

  • Gerald Holmes2 months ago

    This one is special in so many ways! I really hope to see this place in the challenge! Very well crafted. Congrats on the Top Story.

  • Ajda Tomšič2 months ago

    Congratulation!!

  • Anna 2 months ago

    Congrats on TS!🥳

  • olymoolla2 months ago

    Congratulation

  • Grogu2 months ago

    Congratulations🎊 👏🎊 👏 🥳

  • Test2 months ago

    Well-deserved congratulations for your work—keep it up!

  • Gary Lougheed2 months ago

    Why would frostbite blossom? It's like cake tasting bad or a tickle causing blood to run, even rain on a sunny day, or perhaps a forest fire in winter.

  • JBaz2 months ago

    Like the classic it is heartbreaking and yet uplifting. Well done and Congratulations

  • Kendall Defoe 2 months ago

    Wow. This is fantastic! 🔥

  • Stephanie Hoogstad2 months ago

    This is a beautiful retelling of The Little Match Girl. Your vivid imagery in such a short piece particularly struck me. Well done, and congrats on the Top Story.

  • A. Lenae2 months ago

    Beautiful job of retelling a classic with such heart and the bloom of a new perspective. I felt achiness stir as the story unfolded, but somehow there is some hope in the undercurrents of it, I think! Your words are lovely and so evocative, though - thank you for sharing.

  • Cathy holmes2 months ago

    This is so beautifully told. Congrats on the TS and good luck. I think you got a great chance with this one.

  • Harbor Benassa2 months ago

    The story of the little match girl has always fascinated me, and when I read the title, I really hoped that's what this was about. You did not disappoint! I love this alternative ending where she gets to live thanks to her own ingenuity. Nostalgic!

  • Bravery TE Walker2 months ago

    Perfect, delightful read.

  • Margaret Brennan2 months ago

    oh wow! congratulations on TS. so well written and pulls you right in. My first thought was, "I'm so glad SHE's outside"

  • Ashley Shiflett2 months ago

    Lovely, lovely story!!

  • Sandra Matos2 months ago

    I love the part where you show her looking into the "snow globe" homes. I can picture her looking in on the scenes only the snow is on the outside with her. Great entry! Good luck!

  • L.C. Schäfer2 months ago

    Smashing entry, best of luck! I hope it places 😁

  • Caroline Jane2 months ago

    Awww. The little matchstick girl. Eloquently retold. Your skill of brevity shines here. You would not think there was a word limit. Superb turn of phrase.🥰

  • LOvely story and glad you got it past the line in time

  • Babs Iverson2 months ago

    Fantastic story!!!💕♥️♥️

  • Kevin Arasa2 months ago

    This is wonderful.

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