Field of Endings
Flashku
Written for Cendrine Marrouat's Emotional Moment in Nature Flashku Challenge
Flashku requirement of seven words borrowed from another piece were selected from Ralph Waldo Emerson's Essay, Nature. Bolden words were borrowed from the text.
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"How can I possibly let you go?" I utter through tears.
Finally, I release him to the meadow. Grasses sway and bend in the gentle wind that carries him away as the warmth of summer’s final kiss sweeps across the valley. Faded wildflowers wilt– drops of color whispering their last goodbyes. Leaves turn golden as trees await the task of letting go.
Holding an empty urn, I crumble, lost in a field of endings. I wonder how nature so gracefully surrenders to the inevitable.
Suddenly, a leaf flutters before my eyes and I hear a gentle whisper, "You will bloom again."
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Kristen Balyeat
Words fly to me on the wind, bump into me as I'm strolling the city, splash me in the face while I rest by the river, and shake me awake in the middle of the night– I’m humbly one of the many vessels they use to come to life.
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Congrats on your win! 🥂 I told you this challenge was made for you. 😉
so vivid and beautiful
Amazing. Thank you so much for sharing this!
Congrats, Kristen. Yours was a favourite and well deserved win!
Thank you for participating in my challenge! The results are in: https://vocal.media/writers/and-the-winner-of-the-emotional-moment-in-nature-challenge-is. :-)
This is amazing, Kristen. Great photo, and I'm sure it comes as no surprise that I love that area. And the words? Simply beautiful!
Ohhh this is precious! Your descriptive language is an incredible. I really love this entry. I’m also very glad I’m reading all the entries after I wrote mine otherwise I may not have entered at all!! ❤️✨🙏
So very beautiful, thank you for sharing.
The photo is stunning, as is the piece you wrote. May I ask where that photo was taken?
The description was vivid,
Darn it, Kristen. This is just beautiful. I loved the seven words you used, your beautiful woven words of nature and emotion. It's what you do best. Just marvelous and sad but hopeful, as others have noted!
Oh the last part touched my heart so much! You’ve written this so beautifully!
😢 I loved this. Micro fiction often does my head in, but like that you can still include so much emotion and description here in such a small amount of words. Kudos Kristen! 👏☺️
Simply beautiful, Kristen.
So, so, so beautiful, Kristen!! I’m with Naomi. You take us on a deep journey with so few words. I’m so impressed!! 😊👍
This challenge was made for you! You’re in tune with the cycles of nature and beautifully describe them with few words. This was sad yet hopeful and very nicely done.
This is amazing!! I love the phrase “field of endings” ✨
That was so beautiful to read Kristen 😊
Beautiful, Kristen!!!
What a powerful piece! Great job, Kristen!
Wow.. I have never read this essay of Emerson's - and I see now that I must. Beautiful - and I loved your 7. 💙