Pink Floyd's "The Wall"
A Brief Critique Acrostic
Another brick
Below the ground
Reaching too far
Into the heart
Everybody
Falls to the sky
Could not hear any clear Waters
Roger his venomous jotters
In his inner yellowing wall
Towards an external AWOL
In his Judeopathic brain
Quailing any initial gain
Undermining testable facts
Every asshole also reacts
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Patrick M. Ohana
A medical writer who reads and writes fiction and some nonfiction, although the latter may appear at times like the former. Most of my pieces (over 2,200) are or will be available on Shakespeare's Shoes.
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My least favorite PF album, and you have raised points that I have never seen in print before. Excellent work!